View Full Version : Elliott Henry and His Internet Love - Completed Story
miacovaspet
14th Aug 2006, 11:15 AM
Acknowledgements and author’s note:
After reading this post (http://www.sims2community.com/showthread.php?t=17922) about an internet love challenge by Susi2015 I decided to take the challenge and had a lot of fun doing it. I was able to get Elliott to a 100/100 relationship with his love within two sim weeks by using chatting and email. During the course of the challenge I started taking photos and decided to write a story about Elliott’s struggle to find true love. I completed the challenge in keeping with the rules and then added to the story by taking additional photos after completing it.
Dedication:
This story is dedicated to boolPropped who inspired me to write a story here after reading her Unborn Dreams (http://www.sims2community.com/showthread.php?t=20493).
Introduction:
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Elliott Henry grew up in a middle class household with two attentive parents and a darling little sister. The Henry family enjoyed a warm and loving atmosphere in their two-story home nestled against the hills on the outskirts of the Wickering Place. Elliott was always given the best his parents could afford; private school, piano lessons and a quality university education.
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After graduating with honors from SimState University Elliott entered the business career with one goal in mind; to quickly build up a good-sized nest egg, get married and begin a family of his very own. Living as frugally as possible Elliott moved in to a tiny apartment smack dab in the middle of Wickering Place town center.
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Elliott quickly became friends with his neighbors and maintained a busy social life. One night while out on the town with some buddies Elliott spied a beautiful redhead with sexy bedroom eyes, just his type of girl, Elliott was immediately smitten! His heart pounding loudly in his chest he carefully approached this exquisite beauty and was wholly surprised to find her quite receptive to his advances! They introduced themselves, she was Melanie..."Melanie"...he suddenly thought that was the most exotic and tempting name in the world!
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Elliott and Melanie began dating, they were happy; delirious in love they enjoyed each other’s company and spent every free moment they could together.
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Elliott was certain that Melanie was his true love and soon decided that he wanted to spend the rest of his life with her. There was no doubt in his mind that Melanie felt the same way about him!
Elliott was about to find out just how life can throw you a curve when you least expect it!
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Table of Contents:
Chapter 1 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=551917&postcount=8)
Chapter 2 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=553253&postcount=17)
Chapter 3 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=556025&postcount=28)
Chapter 4 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=557881&postcount=41)
Chapter 5 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=559564&postcount=50)
Chapter 6 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=561182&postcount=68)
Chapter 7 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=563961&postcount=86)
Chapter 8 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=565309&postcount=98)
Chapter 9 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=568011&postcount=126)
Chapter 10 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=569067&postcount=144)
Chapter 11 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=570093&postcount=162)
Chapter 12 (http://www.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=573660&postcount=197)
Chapter 13 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=576385&postcount=225)
Chapter 14 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=577321&postcount=243)
Chapter 15 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=578789&postcount=262)
Chapter 16 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=579903&postcount=279)
Chapter 17 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=582026&postcount=299)
Chapter 18 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=584414&postcount=321)
Chapter 19 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=586597&postcount=344)
Chapter 20 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=592376&postcount=373)
Chapter 21 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=597039&postcount=402)
Chapter 22 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=598961&postcount=421)
Chapter 23 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=602595&postcount=450 )
Chapter 24 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=607304&postcount=484)
Chapter 25 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=608407&postcount=510)
Chapter 26 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=610571&postcount=537)
Chapter 27 Part 1 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=611074&postcount=556)
Chapter 27 Part 2 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=611076&postcount=557 )
Chapter 28 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=612342&postcount=588)
Chapter 29 (http://forums.sims2community.com/showpost.php?p=613494&postcount=609)
.~*Iris*~.
14th Aug 2006, 12:15 PM
Really different! putting sims and internet in a story! great idea :D
Can't wait to read more this looks really interesting!
Tixi
14th Aug 2006, 12:16 PM
this is really good so far, and i love your pics
looking forward to an update ^_^
Rad Fad
14th Aug 2006, 02:57 PM
Oh man! I can't wait until you post the next chapter!
LyricLee
14th Aug 2006, 03:01 PM
o0o I already like this very much!
kimussims
14th Aug 2006, 03:32 PM
This looks so good, can't wait for the next chapter (I know I'm impatient)
miacovaspet
14th Aug 2006, 07:45 PM
Hey, thanks for all the feedback! I wasn't expecting so many responses :D
miacovaspet
15th Aug 2006, 06:56 AM
Chapter 1 - Melanie meets Darren
When you love someone,
all your saved-up wishes start coming out.
- Elizabeth Bowen -
One lazy Sunday afternoon I decided to have Melanie and my best bud Darren over for lunch. Darren and I were roommates at SimSate University, he and I were very close. I wanted to introduce him to Melanie, she was going to be part of my life forever and I wanted to make sure my friends would get along with her. To say that Darren is a tad shy would be an understatement he was painfully shy! I was really hoping that he would be willing to talk with Melanie and get to know her a bit; I wanted my best friend and my best girl to become friends. What fun we would have, the three of us, going to games, skiing, mountain climbing, I was really looking forward to it!
Darren had already arrived when Melanie showed up. Melanie was frequently late, it was a bit of an irritant to me but I just knew that if I was patient enough with her in the future I could make her understand that being on time is the respectable and polite thing to do. When Melanie finally arrived I introduced the two of them. Melanie was her usual animated self; Darren of course immediately clammed up but I was confident that Melanie’s natural friendliness and charm would make him open up.
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I left Darren in Melanie’s capable hands while I went to make my specialty, lunchmeat sandwiches.
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Let me tell you, you have never had a sandwich until you’ve tasted my lunchmeat sandwiches! My father taught me to make these sandwiches, my mom was never too impressed with them, she claimed it was something about the combination of pickles, peanut butter and lunchmeat that turned her stomach.
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I was coming back from my kitchen (or cubby as some might call it, remember me telling you that I’m living in a very small apartment?). Anyways, I digress. As I was saying, I was coming back with the sandwiches, the best ones ever, when I noticed that Darren and Melanie were getting along really well, she was talking in her usual cute way and seemed to be bringing him out of his shell.
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We had a great lunch, the three of us. Melanie claimed she wasn’t very hungry after only taking two bites of her sandwich, I offered to save it for her so she could enjoy it later. She just looked at me with the most peculiar expression; I swear it’s so difficult sometimes to understand what women are thinking. We talked about many things, from our childhoods to our university days. Let me tell you, what a relief it was to know that these two people who are so important to me were getting along just fine!
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After lunch I was cleaning up in the kitchen when I heard Melanie say something that sounded like, “you’re place or mine?”, that couldn’t be right, she must have said, “your case of wine”, although that seemed a bit strange since Darren isn’t much of a drinker, except for the occasional run in with a juice keg.
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Anyways, as I was saying, I continued to wash dishes and couldn’t catch the rest of their conversation over the noise of the running water. I made mental note to ask Darren about this case of wine they were talking about, I however, can drink with the best of them and wanted to find out if he was holding out on me!
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After I finished with the dishes Melanie announced that she had to run off for a very important appointment. I protested to no avail. Ah well, I’d see more of her tomorrow and Darren wasn’t leaving yet.
Melanie then turned to Darren and asked if she could offer him a ride home. I was a bit disappointed as I wanted to hang out longer with Darren but hey, the guy doesn’t have a car so it was a good opportunity for him not to have to take the city bus. After looking at his feet for a long moment he reluctantly accepted her kind offer. I thought that was a bit odd, after all, they seemed to be getting along, why was he so shy all of a sudden?
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Being the sweetheart Melanie was, she assured him that he wasn’t putting her out and that his house was on her way home and she wouldn’t mind the company. Turning to me, she gave me a quick kiss and they headed out the door.
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I went to the window to wave goodbye. As soon as I looked out the window my stomach dropped to the floor when I saw….
Fullmoon Lupin
15th Aug 2006, 07:07 AM
Oh my god! I love this story! I can't wait for the next chapter. <3
miacovaspet
15th Aug 2006, 07:09 AM
Oh, thanks Bel :D I'm glad you're enjoying it!
auroraspirit
15th Aug 2006, 07:13 AM
I am loving this story, great work Mia :D
Auroraspirit :angel:
LadySwig
15th Aug 2006, 08:02 AM
Great story :anime: Cant wait for more
kimussims
15th Aug 2006, 10:11 AM
Oh a cliffhanger! I love and hate them argh XD
I'm loving it so far :D
LyricLee
15th Aug 2006, 10:19 AM
Aww man I see it coming but this story is just awesome.
Luthiies
15th Aug 2006, 10:25 AM
He could see it coming....aww !
Great story !
miacovaspet
15th Aug 2006, 01:29 PM
hehehe, thanks everyone. I know it seems obvious what's going to happen but as I'm sure you can tell already Elliott doesn't always see the obvious.
Oh hey, and don't forget to rate the thread if you like it, I'm curious to see the rating.
miacovaspet
16th Aug 2006, 06:45 AM
Chapter 2 – The Traitor
Authors Note: As you’re reading this story for the next several chapters (and the last one too) pay close attention to the discrepancies between Elliott’s words and what the photos show. I don’t want to give anything away but it’s important that you understand that what Elliott perceives is not always what is really going on.
Love Survives
Time to share is always there
I peered thru life
Ever avoiding strife
But now am undone
My barriers broken
For one has found me
Reached in and unbound me
Her love has burst my bonds
And set music to my songs
Her need for me
And mine for she
Has made my Winter Spring
A new start
With hammering heart
We color the world with our dream
Nothing is as it did seem
The darkness of my solitude is done
She - my rising sun.
- Robert K. Charron –
As I looked out that window I couldn’t believe my eyes!!!!
That traitor Darren! That no good, low down son of a gun was making moves on my girl!!! How dare he try to steal my girlfriend!!! He knew how I felt about her, how much in love we were!!!
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I wasted no time in running outside to confront him. Melanie immediately stepped back away from him with a surprised, innocent look on her face. The poor thing, I’m sure Darren’s unasked for advances were very distressing to her as well! Darren whipped his head around and saw me storming towards him with a look of horror on his face and immediately started attempting to tell me that it wasn’t what it looked like…whatever!
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I know that despicable, low down jerk was trying to move in on my girl and no amount of denying from him was going to convince me otherwise.
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There was no tactic he could take that would make me listen to Darren’s flimsy excuses. I was livid with rage, out of control! As if by it’s own will my right arm pulled itself back only to jerk forward again and make contact with Darren’s right eye.
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There he was, motionless in front of me with a stunned look on his face. He reached up to touch the now swollen, bruised eye. In a low, quiet voice Darren slowly stated, “you will never understand what you just did.” That was it, from that moment on our friendship was over, finished, ruined, done period.
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I turned to take Melanie in my arms as Darren took his leave from my property and my life.
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Holding the frightened and crying Melanie I attempted to reassure her that I would never let such a horrible incident happen again. I swiftly made a vow to be more attentive to the type of people I introduced to my sweet Melanie. As I whispered soothing words into her ear she reached her arms around me and pressed her body into mine. She was shaking in my arms; it saddened me to know that she must have been so upset.
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LadySwig
16th Aug 2006, 07:57 AM
Ugh she is soooo not innocent!! Why cant he see that? Great update :D
miacovaspet
16th Aug 2006, 03:51 PM
No she isn't, and for some reason he's not catching on very fast is he?
Hana_Chann
16th Aug 2006, 11:11 PM
That's horrible! I hope Elliot finds a good girl, not a girl like melanie!
Fluffiness101
17th Aug 2006, 12:44 AM
Wow I wish that I came into the story when you first wrote it.. this is great and I cant wait for the next update
miacovaspet
17th Aug 2006, 07:31 AM
Hana - Me too!
Fluffiness - Well, I'm glad you're here now! I'm hoping to get the next chapter up tomorrow.
Fullmoon Lupin
17th Aug 2006, 08:57 AM
I hate Melanie, she's so... lying! I feel bad for Elliott.
.~*Iris*~.
17th Aug 2006, 01:43 PM
Eww I hate her! pretty good actress now isn't she?? traitor...
miacovaspet
17th Aug 2006, 03:05 PM
Thanks for the feedback!
Bel and Iris - yup, Melanie is not turning out to be a very nice girl.
You know this is my first story and it's interesting how it's kind of taking on a life of it's own, lol. I started with a concept but didn't realize exactly where I was going with it until I got to the second chapter.
snowyangst
17th Aug 2006, 10:34 PM
I just started reading your story, and you have me hooked in [pretty deep, I must say!] And Melanie..... *stabs* xD Elliot is too gullible and way in denial... *slaps some sense into him*
miacovaspet
18th Aug 2006, 06:03 AM
Thanks for reading snowyangst! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story :)
miacovaspet
18th Aug 2006, 07:40 AM
Chapter 3 – All is well again
Love reminds you that nothing else matters.
- Amy Bushell -
I wanted to do something nice for Melanie to cheer her up. I asked her if she wanted to go to Bob’s Diner for dinner. She looked at me with those big teary blue eyes, and with lush pouting lips said, “how about we go to Landoste, they serve the most wonderful food”, with a flutter of her lashes.
What can I say, I was a man in love, if my poor tortured Melanie wanted to go to the most expensive restaurant in Wickering Place who was I to say no, of course we would go! Melanie cheered right up and ran inside to powder her nose. As I stood waiting in the living room I began to wonder how much of a dent this outing was going to put in my nest egg.
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When we got to the restaurant Melanie looked so beautiful standing there by the taxi in the moonlight.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65332819.YZlLseBo.02GettingoutofTaxi.jpg
I just had to take her in my arms and kiss her right then and there!
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Melanie and I had a fabulous dinner, my sweetheart ordered the house specialty, lobster thermadore. I decided I wasn’t very hungry and ordered macaroni and cheese. What a wonderful end to a horrible evening!
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The next day I got to thinking….Melanie and I were becoming closer and closer, it was time to take her home to meet my family. I called up mom to extract an invitation for dinner on Saturday night. Mom was very excited to learn I was bringing a date! I asked her how dad was doing after retiring from his career as mad scientist. She said he was enjoying his time by collecting antique furniture and expensive artwork.
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When I got to Melanie’s house to pick her up for dinner on Saturday I was taken aback by the dress she had chosen. I subtly commented on the fact that we were going to dinner at my parent’s who tend to be a bit reserved. She said, “Wonderful I’m glad I picked my best dress”. She didn’t take the hint, and I didn’t want to hurt her feelings, after all I didn’t want her to think I was questioning her sense of style. Not to mention the fact that I thought she was absolutely gorgeous in that dress!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65332823.a6YAMN0p.06PickingupMelanie.jpg
I knew my family was just going to love her……
Fullmoon Lupin
18th Aug 2006, 08:07 AM
Oh... my god... Elliot is so blind! ^v^ Expecting your next chapter already~!
LadySwig
18th Aug 2006, 08:29 AM
She is soooo ugh. Why cant he open his eyes and see that?
auroraspirit
18th Aug 2006, 08:57 AM
Hahaha, I wonder what his grandparents reactions are going to be when they see that dress :blink:
Update soon please.
Auroraspirit :angel:
AnyPika
18th Aug 2006, 11:07 AM
Great story :anime: :anime: :anime:
Melanie is sooo not inocent :grrr: :disagree:
That dress is certainly going to get her the attention she wants :hmm:
nerina
18th Aug 2006, 11:11 AM
That girl is so a liar! But her dress is beautiful, where did you get it? :P Though it's definetely not appropriate for a meal with your boyfriend's family.
shakazulu
18th Aug 2006, 11:27 AM
aww poor elliot, he isn't the sharpest tool in the box is he? bless him, open your eyes man.
and that dress is soooooooo not appropriate for meeting the parents, hmm, i shall have to pitch my tent here now ghanima's storys over, smore anyone??
great job mia, 5 stars for you
Hana_Chann
18th Aug 2006, 02:27 PM
Elliot! Wake up!!! He's too sweet and Melanie is so horrible, he needs to dump her and fast!! I hope his parents can convince him...he's not very bright...but he's a sweetheart...
miacovaspet
18th Aug 2006, 02:43 PM
Thanks you all for making my morning! I just got up, got my coffee and saw all these responses to my story :) writing this story is as addictive as reading them!
Bel and Ladyswig - Yes, I too am hoping he "sees the light soon" :) but you know, Elliott is determined.
Auroraspirit and Anypika - Nope, that dress is not appropriate and I'm not sure what the heck was running through her mind when she chose it!
Nerina - I'll try to remember when I open my game again to check the maker of the dress.
Shakazulu - Watch for the next chapter, sometime this weekend. Corey from The Hidden Palace is going to make an appearance. Thanks for the stars!!!
Hana - Well, hopefully his parents actually see her for what she is. Elliott is close to his parents to maybe they can help the guy out.
shakazulu
18th Aug 2006, 03:19 PM
aww excellent, a guest appearance for corey woohoo, mia you have made my day :)
miacovaspet
19th Aug 2006, 01:50 AM
Shakazulu - I'm going into my game right now to take some photos, story's already been written :D
Fluffiness101
19th Aug 2006, 03:50 AM
UH-OH...I smell rejection in the air...That was a greeat update and I cant wait for the next
miacovaspet
19th Aug 2006, 08:13 AM
Nerina - I can't for the life of me figure out where I got that dress. There seems to be no creator's info about it. I can give you the name if that helps at all...maybe you can put it in the WCIF thread? 2f0ru_vaINF001
Fluffi - thanks so much for the feedback. It's good to hear.
Chapter 4 is finished but I'm not very secure in my writing abilities, it has a lot of text and is very long. I'm going to wait until morning to make sure I still like it before I post it, lol.
Big virtual hugs to whomever gave me the great rating :howdy:
miacovaspet
19th Aug 2006, 06:09 PM
Chapter 4 – Making an Impression
Author’s note: There are a couple of cameo appearances in this chapter. Corey Davies who was in The Hidden Palace contest is by Shakazulu and can be found here (http://www.insimenator.net/showthread.php?p=249497#post249497). Corey’s wife is actually my self-sim, lol, I did not create her, she was created for me by Heartsick, and can be found here (http://www.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?p=1317392#post1317392).
The way to love anything
is to realize that it might be lost.
- G. K. Chesterton –
As we pulled up to my parent’s house I saw them standing on the front porch to greet us. As soon as my car lurched to a stop I swiftly exited the driver’s seat and ran around to open Melanie’s door for her. Walking up the walkway I looked up and was a bit concerned to see my parent’s shocked faces!
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As they quickly composed themselves, I introduced them to the charming Melanie and my mom and dad graciously received her into their home. I was so relieved Melanie had her back to the window where my sister was snickering at us for some reason; I realized I would have to talk with that little twerp later.
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While mom was finishing dinner I showed Melanie around the house. She was quite impressed with dad’s collection of rare artwork! Melanie was unrelenting in exclaiming loudly that each painting must have cost more than the last one.
Mom’s cooking was unsurpassed in Wickering Place and I was really looking forward to a good home cooked meal, the aromas coming from the kitchen were making my mouth water profusely. We had a great conversation over and excellent dinner! I noticed Melanie was having a difficult time ungluing her eyes from the expensive artwork, I thought to myself how wonderful it was for her to take an interest in my father’s hobby.
My little sister was out of control, she kept asking Melanie strange questions like what she did for a living, how long had she known me, and worst of all how much money she made! One of my sister’s questions caught my attention while I was talking to Dad about our yearly fishing trip. I vaguely heard my sister asking Melanie if she liked kids. My head whipped around like a bobble doll as I heard Melanie’s reply, “Kids, blech, they stink and slobber, I’m so not into them!” Wow! One of my dreams, the reason I’d been saving my extra simoleons is to get married and start a family. I wanted children of my own. Melanie and I clearly needed to have a conversation about that!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65374175.qyfX2jqS.03Dinner.jpg
During the entire dinner Mom and Dad kept sharing long, meaningful glances at each other with worried looks on their faces, I wondered briefly what was bothering them. At any rate, despite a few odd instances I thought the evening was a huge success! As we were leaving my mom hugged me tightly and whispered, “honey we need to talk, I’ll call you later.”
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Later that evening after delivering Melanie to her place I received the promised phone call from my mom. I was so excited to find out what they thought of Melanie that I blurted right out, “what do you think, should I ask her to marry me?” There was a long uncomfortable pause, I thought I’d lost the connection and pulled the phone away from my ear to inspect it when I heard mom reply, “Well honey, that’s what I wanted to talk to you about. Are you sure she is the girl for you? You deserve the best; your dad and I want you to be happy and are concerned that maybe you’re not going to happy with Melanie given your long term plans”. Slamming the phone against my ear I indignantly replied, “Mom, you know I love you and Dad but I also love Melanie and I intend to make her my wife, you and Dad will have to accept the my judgment.” She sounded slightly sad as she said, “Son, I trust that you will make the right decision, your father and I will support you and be here for you when you need us.”
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I hung up the phone feeling slightly depressed and rather anxious. It was vital to me that my parents liked and accepted the woman with whom I was to spend the rest of my life with. The next few days were a difficult time for me.
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After talking to Melanie about the children issue (she said that as long as she had enough simoleons to allow for a nanny she thought she’d be able to handle it) I was feeling much better.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65374179.5iDQqm6X.07ElliottandMelanieTalk.jpg
A few weeks later I was joyfully surprised to receive a call from my cousin Corey, who invited Melanie and I to spend the day horseback riding with him and his wife, Mia. What a fantastic idea! I’ve always been an outdoors type of person and I knew Melanie fancied horses.
When she showed up at my house, I could totally tell that Melanie was very eager to go on the outing with me! I was so full of pride upon seeing her dressed appropriately!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65374180.uKD5OPaE.08MelanieDressedRight.jpg
We congregated with Corey and Mia at the base of Mt. Sunflower where they were waiting with their horses. It was unfortunate that Corey and Mia had to wait for us. We were a smidgen (really, only 45 minutes) late because as I mentioned previously Melanie had difficulty being on time, but like I also said we were working on it.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65374182.T1tTU5kz.09CoreyandMia.jpg
It was invigorating being outdoors in the crisp, fresh mountain air. Melanie and Julie got along famously and I was pleased to see that Corey appeared to approve of her as well.
There was one small incident, when we stopped to let the horses have a drink and my foot got caught on dismount I landed with a loud “thud” on my back, I was shocked to hear my love laughing as it turns out, she explained she was laughing at the frogs frolicking in the pond.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65374183.0CfY9sJM.10CoreyFalls.jpg
A few days later, as I was getting home from work the phone was ringing persistently. I rushed to answer it only to find my cousin Corey on the other end of the line. Corey wasted no time in blurting out, “Elliott I just have to tell you there were no frogs in that pond, she was laughing at YOU. I don’t mean to hurt your feelings man but Mia and I are wondering if Melanie is the appropriate girl for you”. My first reaction was to defend my choices and Melanie, but then my thoughts went immediately to the conversation my mother had recently engaged me in, she had said almost those exact words! I quietly thanked Corey for his call and their concern before telling him to pass along a “hello” to Mia for me.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65374184.vUIklPn4.11CoreyandElliottTalk.jpg
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Was there something to what my family was saying? Was I totally missing something that everyone else could see?
*~LadyWaterLilly~*
19th Aug 2006, 07:51 PM
*Grabs Elliot* Gah! Yes, Can't you See?!.
I love the Story, I don't like Melanie though. Gosh, Shes soo rude.
Anyways, Great Story!
gazania
19th Aug 2006, 08:34 PM
Uh, boy ... he's a little TOO blinded by love, isn't he?
nerina
19th Aug 2006, 08:52 PM
Was there something to what my family was saying? Was I totally missing something that everyone else could see?
Yes, you fool, she's a money digger, dump her! Sorry about calling your character fool, Miacovaspet, but he deserve it! I have a similar situation, my sister is dating a total idiot, nobody likes him and everybody tell her so, but she keeps staying at his side. Man, could she just open her eyes!
shakazulu
19th Aug 2006, 09:16 PM
thanks for using Corey, he looks so happy with his wife yeyyyy, as for poor elliot, he cant see the wood for the tree's, or will he finally come to his senses, great update mia as always, i love this story already and thanks for linking Corey's download too, i'll get his wife when modthesims is back up and running.
Hana_Chann
20th Aug 2006, 03:31 AM
NO!!! Elliot is being so stupid!!! Wake up!!! (tosses Melanie out the window) Evil woman! Why can't he see it...but its hard when you're in love but still...he's so dense >< I like his parents though they're sweet ^^
miacovaspet
20th Aug 2006, 04:59 AM
Yipee! More feedback, I love the comments :) Thank you everyone.
From the comments it looks to me like the characters are coming accross just the way I want, that's wonderful!
The next chapter will bring something a little different. Watch for it tomorrow morning.
Nerina - I totally know what you're talking about with your sister. The reason I am really getting into this story is that I've been in Elliott's position before. Everyone kept looking at him and me strangly, his behavior was bad, people were telling me that it wasn't right and still it didn't matter. I left him when I had finally had enough, hopefully Elliott will do the same ;)
AnyPika
20th Aug 2006, 01:03 PM
*talks to the monitor* Yes! Yes! You ARE missing something :damnu: ! *grabs the monitor and shakes it*
It's weird how i can get so in to the story sometimes :blink: .
Anywho, great update :P
miacovaspet
20th Aug 2006, 07:46 PM
Thanks for the note AnyPika!
miacovaspet
20th Aug 2006, 07:51 PM
Chapter 5 – There is life beyond Melanie
"Life is a song - sing it. Life is a game - play it.
Life is a challenge - meet it. Life is a dream - realize it.
Life is a sacrifice - offer it. Life is love - enjoy it."
- Sai Baba –
I thought it was time to share some other parts of my life beyond my romance with Melanie.
Every morning before work I would wake up and go jogging. Jogging was a stress reliever for me. The feeling of the morning wind blowing my hair back, my feet lightly landing on the sidewalk, the sweat dripping from my brow, it all was exhilarating. Jogging was the way I mentally prepared myself for each day looming ahead of me.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378477.JNFjXLME.01Jogging.jpg
There was nothing like a good, challenging game of pool down at the local hole-in-wall tavern with the guys. Get a few drinks in me and I’m good to go all night! I wouldn’t call myself a professional but I’ve been known to hustle a game or two in my time!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378480.9MbqfO6Y.02PlayingPool.jpg
A quieter pastime of mine was visiting the Wickering Place library. I had been going to that library since I was just a young sim. There is something so familiar and comforting about the library, the dusty old book with worn spines that have had hundreds of hands and eyes on them before mine, the classic volumes that were older than me….it always made me feel like I was enveloped by something timeless and priceless. The library was wear I went when I needed to focus and center myself.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378482.DQtzlpjQ.03Library.jpg
My friend Larry and I used to play music together, now we both knew we weren’t ready for primetime but hey, it’s all about the fun and creativity. What a good time we used to have jamming out a Jimmy Hendrix tune!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378486.MtVK0VoC.04PlayingGuitar.jpg
I worked in a Myshuno marketing firm. My desk had a great view of….well the alley really but that was ok with me. I was good at my job, on time, conscientious and always strived to do my best. Marketing Myshuno’s was not exactly the job I wanted to do for the rest of my life but it was a great stepping-stone and was helping in slowly building up that nest egg I was saving for my future family.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378490.5YKjdyov.05Work.jpg
One of my favorite things to do was take my yearly fishing trip with Dad. We went to a little secluded lake about 3 hours South of Wickering Place. There was no noise from traffic, factories making smog, no city disturbances, just my dad, me and the birds and fish. I will always remember the last trip we took. Dad caught 7 fish to my 1! We had an excellent dinner of fresh fish and spent the night in our tent with our heads out in the cool night breeze and talked about the constellations, my childhood and life in general.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378493.eIjpVqJ6.06Fishing.jpg
I’ve always had a weakness for video games and if I don’t say so myself, I’m pretty good at them! My friends used to draw straws to determine who would have to play against me as they always lost. Seriously, I don’t think I was all that superior but as time went on it became a joke and we had a lot of fun with it!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378495.FJ9VIzCj.07PlayingGames.jpg
Every now and then on a free weekend afternoon I would swing by and pick up my little sister to take her to the movie theater in town. I’m pretty sure she and I enjoyed the snacks and the company more than the movie but that was ok, it was a fantastic ritual to have!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65378497.SE5bc3JG.08WatchingMovies.jpg
Yes indeed, there was life beyond Melanie, but during these times I always missed having her beautiful presence by my side.
Party_girl_146
20th Aug 2006, 08:22 PM
Mia,i have been reading your story and i love it!
:grrr: Grrrr,why is “Elliott so blind?Please wake up and see that she doesnt care about you!I hope he finds a decent girl that actually likes him! ;)
miacovaspet
20th Aug 2006, 08:30 PM
Party girl - thanks for the response :) I know, we can all see that she doesn't care for him and he just doesn't have a clue! Makes you wonder what Melanie is really after doesn't it?
kimussims
20th Aug 2006, 08:47 PM
Awww I love Elliot, I wanna put him in my game and give him a nice loving girl to start a family with. Melanie doesn't deserve him.
shakazulu
20th Aug 2006, 09:09 PM
i want elliot too, i reckon i have a lovely alien that will love him for who he is :)
great update mia
miacovaspet
20th Aug 2006, 11:04 PM
Kimussims and Shakaluzu, I'm happy to upload Elliott. I actually cloned Elliott, Melanie, Mom, Dad and Sister.
As soon as I figure out how to package them (for some reason I'm not remembering the steps) I'll have them ready to go. When inseminator.net comes back up I'll put them up for download. In the meantime if you want to send me a PM with your email address I'll email whoever you want.
Edited to say: *slaps palm to head* duh! I do it in Bodyshop, lol.
kimussims
20th Aug 2006, 11:12 PM
That would be amazing! Expect a PM :D
Hana_Chann
21st Aug 2006, 01:48 AM
Great chapter update, I liked seeing a side-story on his personal life ^^
Rad Fad
21st Aug 2006, 03:20 AM
Yeah, I would totally upload Elliott.
miacovaspet
21st Aug 2006, 05:52 AM
OK, guys I just submitted a post on modethesims2 for you all to download Elliott. I'll let you know when it's live :)
JustALittleSimGirl
21st Aug 2006, 10:29 AM
wow, great story i just read all of it and all of your comments, i have only just got into reading stories, i wish i had gotten into this one eairlier, actually no i dont because then i would have to wait for the updates, like i am having to do now ARGH WHY CANT YOU JUST PUT UP THE NEXT B***DY STORY, sorry gettin outa control nd lol u guys posts make me laugh;
*Grabs Elliot* Gah! Yes, Can't you See?!. lol lady water and
i want elliot too, i reckon i have a lovely alien that will love him
for who he is :) lol shakazulu
:cdance: :dance: :clap:
great story, nd get the update up!!!!!!!
GrimmieTheReaper
21st Aug 2006, 11:36 AM
Great update!I love Elliot, but damn, why is he so blind?
Muscat
21st Aug 2006, 07:37 PM
oh,don't be angry with Elliott.sometimes in love people see what they want to see.
i really like this story!
miacovaspet
21st Aug 2006, 08:06 PM
Justalittlesimgirl - Thanks for the note :) As far as the next chapter, I have the photos uploaded to my host site and the story in my work email...shhh...going to do it when I get a free moment at work today.
Grimmie - Thanks for the response, he's so blind because he just wants his dreams to come true!
Monica - Thanks for sticking up for Elliott, the poor guy needs some support, lol.
Party_girl_146
21st Aug 2006, 08:25 PM
It's great that you uploaded Elliot,i'm so gonna download him when he's up and give him the most caring,loving and nice girl i have in my game!
And please,update soon,i love your story and i need more too read:D :thumb: !
shakazulu
21st Aug 2006, 08:42 PM
mia you got featured yayyyyyyyyyyyyy
miacovaspet
21st Aug 2006, 09:10 PM
Party Girl - I'll post here when he's up for download :) I'm planning on updating today.
Shakazulu - Yes, I noticed that the other day....I was unreasonably excited about it, lol. As my teenage daughters tell me frequently, "I need to get a life".
Party_girl_146
21st Aug 2006, 09:23 PM
Yay!Update!I'll be here waiting for that!
miacovaspet
21st Aug 2006, 11:36 PM
Chapter 6 – Reflections
Love isn't blind; it just only sees what matters.
- William Curry –
Melanie and I had been dating for over a year. It was time to take our relationship to the next level. I wanted to start my family, I was ready, and the longing in my heart was growing stronger as each day passed. Things were going well for me. I had an excellent job and had just received a promotion to department lead, which came with a hefty salary increase. I hadn’t been spending much time with my friends lately, for some reason when I started to include Melanie on our outings they frequently came up with excuses about other obligations. My parents stopped trying to convince that Melanie was wrong for me, except for the time my sister tried to set me up with her best friend’s older sister I felt like my family was coming around.
As I was saying, it was time to take our relationship to the next level, time to propose marriage. I thought back over the last year 15 months and all the good times we had together.
There was the time we went shopping and Melanie let me help her pick out an outfit at a boutique downtown, too bad she forgot her purse that day.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438541.So33a9te.01BuyingClothes.jpg
And the time she was so thoughtful to surprise me when I got home from working late one night with a surprise party. What a night that was, I’m still not sure why Alan was the only guest.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438543.HFn44Jat.03MelaniesParty.jpg
One time I decided to try out a new look and dropped by Melanie’s place to ask what she thought of it. Never mind, it’s not important that I talk about that…
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438542.iw4nDhCm.02NewLook.jpg
One day we went shopping for a new car and while I was looking at the quality used cars Melanie was making a deal for me with the sales manager on a new sports car. I’m hoping to re-finance soon to lower the exceedingly high payments.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438545.R4F5P24A.04BuyingCar.jpg
I loved having Melanie over to spend the night, she frequently did so on Saturday nights. She used to nag me about getting a double bed, but we worked it out with me sleeping on the floor. I always woke up with a back ache but Melanie gave wonderful massages!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438546.fLWotwiG.05Sleeping.jpg
Lazy Sunday mornings after Melanie had spent the night were so enjoyable. Most Sunday mornings I woke up, got the newspaper and read it from front to back, always in order. The mornings Melanie had spent the night were a little different….she would insist that she read the newspaper first, said she got a headache if she didn’t, the problem was that she only wanted to read the funny pages and everything got out of order, it was slightly disturbing to me but all in all what’s an out of order newspaper compared to the happiness of my love? Another tradition we had on Sunday mornings was for me to bring her coffee, she explained that she constantly managed to burn herself when she poured her own coffee, I would have hated to see her in pain!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438547.Z02eCNxC.06Morning.jpg
Oh, and I can’t forget when she thoughtfully re-decorated my apartment for me, what a kind gesture! Ok, so it’s not quite my style, but it’s the thought that counts. She was a little upset when I asked what she had done with my possessions; luckily they were out behind the apartment building by the dumpster. Although she couldn’t stay to help me move my belongings back in, I was relieved to hear her say, “do whatever you want” before she left.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438548.GYfoVip2.07Decorating.jpg
It was important to Melanie that she stay fit so we liked to visit the local gym together. This was the type of thing I imagined doing with my future wife, I immensely enjoyed participating in these every day things with Melanie, it made me feel like she was really including me in her life and that was important to me.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65438550.OklHfm0Q.08Gym.jpg
Yes, looking back on this period of our lives together it was obvious to me that the moment was right. Now all I had to do was figure out the most romantic way to propose...
erinboberin33
22nd Aug 2006, 02:21 AM
I dont know why you haven't gotten any comments yet....
But i love this story! ^^
Elliot is sooooo blind >.<
rome_raven
22nd Aug 2006, 03:21 AM
Can I kick Elliot now? or better yet, knock Melanie out and hide her so he can never find her again!
LyricLee
22nd Aug 2006, 03:25 AM
haha I love the update!!!
miacovaspet
22nd Aug 2006, 06:22 AM
Erin and Rome I really appreciate the notes :)
Lyric - I wanted to thank you (or whoever it is that does it) for putting my story on the featured list!
It's official Elliott is up for download at Modthesims2. Get him here (http://www.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?t=184718).
Now, I know he's not the most handsome of sims but I think that's part of what makes him endearing so please be kind to his pixelated self when it lands in your computer, he deserves to be happy for all the torture Melanie and I are putting him through!
auroraspirit
22nd Aug 2006, 06:34 AM
Great chapter! I wish most people would leave Melanie alone lol, I think she is a lovely girl, who is innocent in her own way, though she may seem a little self centred, but what's a story without a little drama and hic cups along the way :D
Now, when they are going to have those adorable children in the story.
Auroraspirit :angel:
JustALittleSimGirl
22nd Aug 2006, 10:25 AM
oh, is melaine up for download to? I have some.....*cough cough* plans for her......mwuha....mwauhaha....... :bombface:......... MWUAHAHAHAHAHA :muffy:
great update, when will the next be up? nd it is SOOO obvious now, seriously some1 get this dude a new pair of eyes.
nerina
22nd Aug 2006, 10:34 AM
This was hilarious! Poor Elliott, he's so blind! Still, I have a doubt... the title is "Elliott Henry and His Internet Love"... but still no internet or such... I expect when they're married (because she's definetley going to accept) he meet a nice girl on the web that makes him open his eyes?
AnyPika
22nd Aug 2006, 11:47 AM
Wiiiiiii an update :anime:
I hope he gets rid of Melanie soon :taekwondo
shakazulu
22nd Aug 2006, 12:08 PM
i have got to have elliot lol, and melonie, she's going to be Sg'glu's next test subject mwahahahaha, that'll teach her
great update as always
Hana_Chann
22nd Aug 2006, 02:08 PM
Elliot....what's going to happen to make him see the truth about her
kimussims
22nd Aug 2006, 02:24 PM
Awww I feel for Eilliot, he's a sweetie and deserves better than Melanie, looking forward to the next chapter!
LadySwig
22nd Aug 2006, 02:34 PM
He's still falling for it. Omd he is very blind
gaeadaraza
22nd Aug 2006, 08:30 PM
I just read your story and love it. I really like the poems or quotes at the beginning of each chapter. Looking forward to the next update.
*pushes the subscribe button*...
sometimes I feel like I read these stories more than I play. :)
miacovaspet
22nd Aug 2006, 10:55 PM
Thank you all for the kind words and the love sentiments! It might be a couple days until the next update, I've been shooting them off pretty rapidly for the last week or so but this week I to spend some time making a couple of contest entries. Below are responses to your comments.
Auroraspirit - You have an interesting take on Melanie, You might be right in your opinion of her. I'm not sure that's what I had in mind for her but maybe I'm not capable of making a truely evil character. It's not that I pictured her stabbing him in his sleep or anything, she might be the perfect girl for someone else, just not right for Elliott. Do you really think Elliott will be able to handle parenting with Melanie?
JustALittleSimGirl - Melanie is not up for download yet. Right now I have her in my email so if you'd like to send me a PM I'd be happy to email her to you. I'm planning on posting her on Modthesims2 tonight.
Nerina - You're right, you have not seen anything about the internet yet. If you go back and re-read my very first post you'll find it's kind of a spoiler so I'm not giving anything away by saying that he hasn't met his internet love yet. The question that remains is what does he go through to get there?
AnyPika - I'm anxious for him to dump her and move on as well but the story has a life of it's own and each part has it's place. We'll just have to be patient, and continue hoping that he sees the light soon.
Shakazulu - I'm so sorry, I forgot to send him to you last night. At any rate you can download him here. (http://www.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?t=184718)
Hana Chann - I don't know...sometimes I just want to shake him until the pixels fall out of his head!
Kimussims - Thank you for the note, it's good to know that you are still enjoying my story.
Ladyswig - Yes, it does appear to us that he's blind...or maybe he just doesn't care? Not sure, either way he's a glutton for punishment.
Gaeadaraza - Nice feedback on the quotes, I thought that would give it a little something special. I know what you mean about reading more than playing. I don't think I've actually played the sims since I started exploring this site about 2 months ago. Now all I do is contest entries, lol.
auroraspirit
23rd Aug 2006, 04:32 AM
That's probably a good point mia lol, I don't think Elliot would have many colour hairs remaining rofl, it will be sad for Melanie to go though, I hope they remain friends however if they do sadly split :(
Auroraspirit :angel:
Vicci
23rd Aug 2006, 12:42 PM
Oooh, I've just started reading this and I love it! -Adds to favourites- I like the way the story is going but Elliot is so blind! Poor man. And that pink room? Eugh!! I guess it was kind of nice of her though.. I wonder what she'll do when Elliot proposes?
Congratulations on your feature, you deserve it! I love the idea of this story and I'm determinded to try this internet thing myself. I can't wait to find out what happens next. ^^
miacovaspet
24th Aug 2006, 05:51 AM
Auroraspirit - You're so sweet! I don't know about the friends thing...we'll have to wait and see ;)
Vicci - I'm glad you stopped by! When you said you are determined to try the internet thing yourself I thought you meant in real life, lol. I met my husband online. After reading your post agian I realized that you mean the challenge :D
miacovaspet
24th Aug 2006, 06:45 AM
Chapter 7: Romantic Preparations
"Choices that deal with love are like alcohol, when you are under the influence of it you tend to do things that you regret later on."
-Unknown-
As I sat in front of my computer I was more confused than ever. I wanted to find the most special, perfect way to propose. It must be a day she would never forget! Here’s what I found:
Take her to a romantic dinner.
Boring!
Propose under water.
What?
Travel to Paris and propose under the Eiffel Tower.
Nice idea but….wow, that sure would take a lot of simoleons!
Declare your intentions at a sporting event.
Somehow I didn’t thins she was quite that type of girl….
I spent several hours searching and then the idea hit me like a ton of bricks in the head!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670453.nZMITCRD.01Ideas.jpg
I changed my clothes and jumped into my new sport scar and zoomed off down the road, I had to see a man about a plane and buy a ring!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670454.vWEEsEcL.02GoingOut.jpg
When I got to Central Airlines I talked with a helpful guy named Jake. He understood what I was asking for and took all my information. I wrote him a hefty check and then I was off on my mission to find the perfect ring.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670455.gS91LFGK.03Airplane.bmp
It was a long drive to the jewelry store but I made it there before they closed. Standing in front of the engagement ring display I was totally lost. I had no idea what to look for, what would Melanie like? I knew that she cared about my plans for the future and why I was saving money so she wouldn’t want a huge ring that would dip deep into my nest egg. I just didn’t know what to do; I’d never bought an engagement ring before!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670456.5wjmcGER.04Ring1.jpg
The salesman must have noticed me looking confused and offered to help. He gave me a crash course in engagement rings and after asking how much I was planning on spending suggested a ¼ carat princess cut solitaire set in a gold band. It was beautiful, perfect! I knew Melanie was going to love it! My palms felt clammy and I was a little light headed as I paid for ring and slipped it into my pocket. All the way home I kept touching it, this symbol of the depth of my love, just to make sure it was still there….wow, it was really happening, I was going to ask Melanie to marry me!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670457.QPIATeS3.05Ring2.jpg
A few days later I invited Melanie with me to the lake where my dad and I fish. I had a romantic picnic planned with the surprise proposal to follow. She readily accepted my invitation. The entire drive to the lake I couldn’t think of anything else, I was so excited! When we got to the lake I started setting up our picnic. This didn’t go as well as planned, Melanie had an aversion to bugs and the entire time I was getting lunch for us she was muttering to herself and stamping her feet.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670459.3RxGa2cP.06Picnic1.jpg
I got her calmed down and we had a lovely picnic, we talked about everything from work to family to travel.
As lunch was ending I glanced at my watch and knew it was time. “Melanie”, I said, “would you like to take a short hike up the hill for a while, there is a great view!”. Her response was to look at me askance and say, “What?”. I explained again that I wanted to take a walk (decided not to use the word “hike” again) up the hill. She reluctantly agreed.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65670461.T81ycAAx.07Picnic2.jpg
As we started the ascent I began to get extremely nervous, my mouth was dry, I was sweating profusely and I felt like my heart was beating so fast it was going to jump out of my chest! We got to the top of the hill in one piece, thank goodness! I brushed some dirt and leaves from a log and suggested we have a seat. As we settled in I reached over I pulled her close to my side, put my face against her hair and breathed deeply of her strawberry scented hair. I loved her so much; she was a part of me, every part of me. Glancing at my watch again I knew it was time…
LadySwig
24th Aug 2006, 08:42 AM
Argghhh WHYYY ELLIOTT WHY?
JustALittleSimGirl
24th Aug 2006, 11:49 AM
oo u idiot henry!!! whens the next chapter coming!?!?!?
GrimmieTheReaper
24th Aug 2006, 01:55 PM
Whee, I've been doing some "school stuff" and when i looked here, what do i found?TWO new chapters..Whee :clap:
But..Oh my God...
No, no, no....No Elliot!!
miacovaspet
24th Aug 2006, 02:44 PM
Ladyswig - I know it's difficult for us but he's a determined little guy!
JustALittleSimgGirl - I may get the next chapter up today if I have time at work to write it. I took the photos last night :)
Grimmie - How fun :) I actually like the stories that are already completed when I start reading them because I don't have to wait to see what's going to happen next. On the other hand....the suspense is fun too!
kimussims
24th Aug 2006, 06:33 PM
No Elliot don't do it!!!!
Also I love that you update often, I'm so impatient :)
nerina
24th Aug 2006, 06:47 PM
I so know she's gonna accept it, as i so know she's gonna look at the ring like it's crap... I hate that woman!
Hana_Chann
24th Aug 2006, 06:52 PM
Noooooo!!!!
miacovaspet
25th Aug 2006, 01:24 AM
Kimussims, I didn't get a chance to update today at work. You know, work always seems to mess up my fun (maybe I shouldn't be trying to do sims stuff at work, lol). I'm going to work on it tonight.
Nerina and Hana, I know it's sad isn't it? Elliott is ready to commit his life to this woman who just isn't going to make him happy in the long run.
Edited to say: I just found out that Melanie is up on modthesims2 here (http://forums.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?t=185537) for download. I didn't dress her in any custom clothes, make-up or hair but you should still be able to recognize her :)
realmask316
25th Aug 2006, 05:36 AM
You know I think Elliott may need some help in the future, poor thing.
I was hoping there was an update but I guess Ill just have to make some coffee and wait
Take care
teardrops182
25th Aug 2006, 06:01 AM
no elliot dont marry her!! *gets hammer and bashes melanie* gaah stupid melanie! :smash: lol! sorry, i get kind of into stories! :(
Edit: i was too upset with melanie and forgot to tell you that i love this story! :P great work! :D
miacovaspet
25th Aug 2006, 06:54 AM
realmask316, Ok, Ok, I'm going, lol. Acutally shortly after I posted that messager earlier I took a vicoden and lay down "just for a little bit" which turned out to be 4 hours. I had a dental appointment today, no big deal really but enough to warrant a little help and a nap :)
teardrops 182, thanks for the note! And I agree, sometimes I want to just smack that girl. But hey, she might make the perfect wife....you never know ;)
miacovaspet
25th Aug 2006, 08:23 AM
Chapter 8 - Proposal
Perfection in my Eyes
All I ever wanted was to be part of your heart,
And for us to be together, to never be apart.
No one else in the world can even compare,
You're perfect and so is this love that we share.
We have so much more than I ever thought we would,
I love you more than I ever thought I could.
I promise to give you all I have to give,
I'll do anything for you as long as I live.
In your eyes I see our present, our future and past,
By the way you look at me I know we will last.
I hope that one day you'll come to realize,
How perfect you are when seen through my eyes.
- Ashley Borden -
I heard it before I saw it, a low rumbling from far off, as it got closer I said, “Melanie, what’s that?” We both looked up to see the plane begin writing my message of love in the sky. “Oh Elliott”, she gasped. My throat felt as if it was full of cotton and not a sound would come out but it didn’t matter because the airplane was writing my words for me.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722946.HiNkfsfF.01Skywriting.jpg
I stood up and reached for her soft, delicate hand to help her up from the log. Kneeling in front of her I began to speak, in a quiet, halting, emotional tone, “Melanie, I love you. You mean the world to me. I cannot imagine life without you. It is you and your love who make me the man I am!”
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722947.U5WbYs1R.02ConfessionsofLove.jpg
Reaching down I slowly pulled the black box from my pocket. As I lifted it I looked up into her eyes, her beautiful, deep green eyes and saw them light up. The entire world was gone, it was just us two, on top of a mountain by a secluded lake. I felt the sun beating down on my back, warming my body as my soul drew in the warmth from my love’s eyes.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722948.cGZdR8mS.03TheRingBox.jpg
As if in slow motion I moved my hand to the front of the box and opened it. Somehow I was able to squeak out the words past the lump in my throat, “Melanie, will you be my wife? The diamond caught the light from the sun as Melanie gasped and sighed, “Elliott, yes, yes!”
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722949.PAZegivb.04TheRing.jpg
She hesitantly reached for the ring as a glimmer of something passed over her face, it looked like disappointment but that couldn’t be right, she had just said yes, hadn’t she? As that thought passed through my mind I kept playing that word over and over again, “yes, Yes, YES”. She said YES!!!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722951.O51U5Xls.05MelanieLookingatRing.jpg
Melanie slipped the ring on her hand. It was a perfect fit, just as we were a perfect fit for each other! My heart was beating double-time, my stomach was lurching like rubber raft on rapids, I was sure I was going to pass out. “Elliott”, she said, “it’s so, so, um, petite.” “Petite”, I knew she was going to love it, I wasn’t sure why she chose that word in particular, but it was obvious that she loved it and she loved me too!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722952.e3DSkOXr.06MelanieHoldingouthand.jpg
My brain managed to communicate to my legs that it was time to stand up. Melanie leaped into my arms and I held her close to me as I twirled her around. What a way to start our lives together, I was literally and figuratively on top of a mountain with my head in the clouds!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722953.TBEV20XT.07Hugging.jpg
“Melanie,” I said, “when should we get married?” Her reply was, “as soon as possible!” We had a lot of planning to do but that could wait for later, right now it was time for the two of us to bask in our love.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65722954.GVF5gw30.08Closeupofring.jpg
auroraspirit
25th Aug 2006, 09:02 AM
What a wonderful update Mia :D Yah Elliot finally proposed to Melanie, how cute :valentine :lovestruc :luff: :cdance:
Auroraspirit :angel:
Dusica_SC
25th Aug 2006, 09:08 AM
Damn u Elliot! :damnu: :stick: you`re blind!
Ahh i am ofiicially hooked to this story. :bump: Amazing story mia
auroraspirit
25th Aug 2006, 09:12 AM
I think your avator expresses how you feel towards Elliot Dusica rofl :D
Auroraspirit :angel:
kimussims
25th Aug 2006, 10:40 AM
Elliot! Nooo *smacks Elliot over the head* Aww but it was romantic :)
miacovaspet, work always gets in the way of fun ;)
teardrops182
25th Aug 2006, 11:27 AM
teardrops 182, thanks for the note! And I agree, sometimes I want to just smack that girl. But hey, she might make the perfect wife....you never know originally posted by Miacovaspet
she better be a good wife!! hehe, after all, theyre getting married now! :( (the sad face was the edit) lovely update by the way, im getting sucked into this story, lol! i want more, i want more! but dont rush, take your time to make it perfect like the other ones :);)
GrimmieTheReaper
25th Aug 2006, 12:43 PM
Oh no..But can't say that wasn't romantic..She is better going to be faithfull to Elliot or else....
fi5404
25th Aug 2006, 01:06 PM
loving the story mia, grrrrrrrrrrrrrr men make me so mad sometimes, and women like that arghhhhhhhhh, i almost feel like he deserves her.But she definitely doesn't deserve him.
melanie_SC
25th Aug 2006, 01:06 PM
Great story! I didn't even think that was what the plane would be used for .. -.-
I didn't think Melanie would want to marry Elliott, but she's a material girl isn't she? Great story.
nerina
25th Aug 2006, 01:23 PM
I was right.. "Petite"... he definetely is blind!
Vicci
25th Aug 2006, 02:11 PM
Aw. I thought it would be something like a plane banner but in smoke? Woah. Aw, Elliot is so nice and is obviously blinded by love poor bloke. If only he would open his eyes.
rome_raven
25th Aug 2006, 02:47 PM
I hope they don't end up married in the end!:flame: Please let someone object by the time they ask for the objections at the wedding
gaeadaraza
25th Aug 2006, 03:13 PM
Ok, I believe that i have finally figured out the problem with Elliott. He's not very smart... I mean really. He thinks that "petite" is a good word to describe a ring. I think we need to buy him dictionary or thesaurus or something. Anyone agree with me? ...ok. I'm heading out the door now to Wal Mart, I'll get him one ,mkay?
Keep em coming!
realmask316
25th Aug 2006, 03:30 PM
“Petite” OMGosh you had me laughing so hard I could not drink my water. I know it's kinda sad but that was funny!
Thanks for the update
JustALittleSimGirl
25th Aug 2006, 04:13 PM
u think that maybe melaine will tell elliot about what she has done before and then she says that she has changed nd she aint like that any more and maybe elliot will leave her!!!! or conserdering such an idiot he is he will for give her that my idea!!!
Captain THPS4
25th Aug 2006, 05:20 PM
Great update! I read it all last night but I didn't have enough time to comment (it was really late). I'm surprised that Melanie said yes, she looks like a romance sim to me, lol! Can't wait to see how this "marriage" goes. Maybe Melanie thinks that marriage is just a three year commitment like Bart's girlfriend in the future from an episode of The Simpsons. :bump:
LyricLee
25th Aug 2006, 05:28 PM
Great update, Your pictures are just gorgeous
simsfanforever99
25th Aug 2006, 05:31 PM
is melanie uploadible ?
LyricLee
25th Aug 2006, 05:37 PM
shes on mts2
Hana_Chann
25th Aug 2006, 06:13 PM
NOOOOOOO!!!! Elliot!!! You're too good for Melanie!!
But great porposal Mia, it was so sweet ^^
AnyPika
25th Aug 2006, 07:55 PM
'Petite' :lol: what a hypocrite that Melanie is :swear: she'll probably cheat on him with waiter on their wedding or something :banghead: :flame: :disagree: :grrr: :soul:
miacovaspet
26th Aug 2006, 06:22 AM
Auroraspirit - Thank you and I thought it was cute too and very "Elliott-ish"
Dusica - Thank you and I'm so glad I hooked you!
Kim - I know...I sure wish I could figure out a way to make money playing sims full time :gidea:
Teardrops - Thanks for the encouragement! I wonder, do you think Melanie really does care about Elliott in her own way?
Grimmie - I'm not convinced that Melanie knows how to be faithful!
fi5404 - I agree, Elliott deserves better! I'm glad you are enjoying the story :)
Melanie - Wonderful! I was hoping the plane would make you all wonder, :D
Stefania - Well, she didn't come right out and say it was too small....she's just got a "way" with words!
Vicci - Glad you liked the plane concept :) Elliott is nice and so very naive!
rome raven - Hm, I suppose something might come up.....you never know though, even something is right in front of his face Elliott seems to be oblivious to it.
gaeadaraza - :rofl: I love it! Maybe that dictionary will help him. "He's not very smart...I mean really" oh my gosh, you had me rolling when I read that :)
realmask316 - Well, it's ok that you laughed :D it was meant to be puzzling to Elliott and funny to you :)
JustALittleSimGirl - I'm not saying anything about your second post! Anything I would say might be a spoiler :eviltongu
Captain THPS4 - I'm so flattered that you stayed up late to read my story! I actually think I made her a fortune sim in my game but she certainly has romance tendancies...even on her own she rolls "flirt with's" for other sims besides Elliott! I agree with you, Melanie's version of marriage and Elliott's might not be the same, lol.
LyricLee - Thanks for the compliments!
simsfanforever99 - Yes, you can download melanie here: http://www.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?t=185537 (thanks for letting simsfan know!)
Hana Chann - thank you, Elliott was going for sweet and memorable and I think he acheived it :D
AnyPika - Knowing Melanie you've probably hit the nail on the head but I'm not telling!
shakazulu
26th Aug 2006, 01:33 PM
what the heck is he on, wanting to marry her, arggh i feel a heartbreaking happening eventually, pride comes before a fall???
poor elliot, and mean old melonie
thurprin25
26th Aug 2006, 08:28 PM
I love the story. But something's up with Melanie. I have a feeling something very bad is going to happen soon...
simsfanforever99
26th Aug 2006, 10:03 PM
i think she's a conartist
SongBirdWVU
27th Aug 2006, 04:38 AM
Ohh.. I just found this story and it's so interesting! I can't wait to see what kind of fiancee or wife she'll be... gag...
hockeystatqueen_SC
27th Aug 2006, 04:43 AM
I love this story so much! :D
A while back, I took this challenge.
My Sim(female Sim) married Edward Fuchs(sp?) but I had to age him up with InSim because I didn't know he was just a teen when I had my Sim meet him.
miacovaspet
27th Aug 2006, 07:24 AM
Shakazulu, Thurprin and Simsfanforever - I think you might be right, something is up with Melanie ;)
Songbird - I'm glad you found the story :) Thanks for the note!
Hockeystatqueen - I'm glad you're enjoying this story. I found the challenge to be fun as well, and it was a quick challenge to do, I did in just one Sunday morning.
miacovaspet
27th Aug 2006, 07:37 AM
Chapter 9 – Getting ready for Nuptials
"Men who do not forgive women their little faults will never enjoy their great virtues."
- Khalil Gibran –
Melanie and I had planned a short engagement, just three months. One of the first things on our task list for the wedding was to choose my suit. Melanie suggested a little boutique in downtown Wickering Place. I was a slightly nervous; I usually go into a store, find what I need and within minutes am out the door again. I knew this was going to be a different experience and I was right….
The first suit I tried on was a fine gray one that I thought looked quite dashing on me. Melanie did not feel the same way. So on to the next.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809365.BFz6DQ0m.1GreySuit.jpg
After trying on a few more suits with no agreement between us a dark blue pinstripe was next on the line up. This was by far my favorite! It flattered me, was not too pretentious and after I took a quick look at the price tag I knew it was affordable, this was definitely the suit for me! Well, that’s what I though until I took a look at Melanie’s face. Clearly she was not impressed. Oh, well, it was more important that we compromise and agree on all the decisions for our wedding.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809366.d2v0xcBW.2PinstripeSuit.jpg
I continued trying on several more to no avail I was getting tired of shopping and Melanie was getting frustrated with me. I hated to see her like that, it was so important to me that we agree and come to some sort of meeting place. If not, how in the world would be have a happy healthy marriage? Melanie turned to the clothing rack and pulled out a pink tux! Pink! I thought to myself, “oh, she really didn’t want me to try that on did she?” She most certainly did! I hated it, she loved it. In the end I bought it. After all, the wedding was really for the bride, it was her day to shine and if she wanted me in a pink tux, she would have me in a pink tux!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809367.Ao7nxhUT.3PinkTux.jpg
After the shopping trip for my tux I pretty much let Melanie plan the wedding. I offered input when she asked but soon realized that it wasn’t clear to me why she was asking for my input, as she would invariably choose the opposite of what I suggested. I didn’t mind, the wedding was just a formality to the beginning of our lives together and that was the most important thing, that I was going to spend the rest of my life with the woman I loved!
A few days before the wedding my parent’s hosted a rehearsal dinner party at the Grand Hotel in Wickering Place. It was lovely! Both of our families were there along with the entire bridal party.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809368.2xO10Wxa.4RehearsalDinner.jpg
At one point during dinner I ooked to up to find Melanie talking with my sister, she was so beautiful, so exquisite and elegant! I felt my eyes tear up as I gazed at this woman who was to be my wife in a couple of days. Swallowing the lump in my throat I distracted myself with the conversation flowing around me.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809369.fNWvpSo5.5RehearsalDinner.jpg
After dinner Melanie’s father offered a touching toast to us and our happiness with each other in our marriage.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809370.3BZpFEWn.6Toast.jpg
I really liked Melanie’s father. He was an eloquent, gentle man. I wasn’t sure what exactly to make of Melanie’s mom. She seemed to complain a lot and kept asking members of my family what they did for a living and even how much money they made, including me! After the toast I spent some time chatting a little more with Melanie’s mom and dad. During a puase in our talk I looked around the room to see where my bride-to-be was and didn’t see her. I excused myself from the conversation and went to find her.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809371.lQjK9NTX.7Chatting.jpg
I found her all right, in the hotel lounge!
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809372.zsk5Svoj.8Drinking.jpg
I stood there in amazement as I stared at my fiancé drinking directly from the tap of the juice keg! Apparently she hadn’t had enough to drink with the toast earlier and found her own source of liquid courage! My mind was racing a million miles a minute…how was I going to get my now more than tipsy girlfriend out of the hotel without alerting our guests?
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809373.aGvBEHC4.9Drinking.jpg
I managed to engage the bartender to help me get Melanie out the back door and to the parking lot.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809374.sQcJ73lV.10Drinking.jpg
As soon as I had her settled in the car I ran back in and explained that Melanie was a bit overwhelmed from all the excitement. I extended our apologies for leaving early and appreciation for the wonderful evening and took my leave to take my drunken fiancé to her house to tuck her in bed. The wedding was to be in two days and I knew she was going to have one heck of a hangover so I stayed at her place that night to take care of her.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65809375.UtwheIqk.11WeddingInvitation.jpg
nerina
27th Aug 2006, 09:31 AM
He's so cute and caring, she really doesn't deserve him! Can't anything happen to her? Death by satellite, being taken by aliens...? Come on, Mia, you're the writer!
GrimmieTheReaper
27th Aug 2006, 10:01 AM
Awww, Elliot is so sweet.Maybe a little stupid, because he can't see what Melanie is really like.Elliot is WAY too good for Melanie.
realmask316
27th Aug 2006, 10:12 AM
Glad I stayed up! This is really turning into a dark comedy but on the lighter side of dark unless your Elliott but funny cause he seems so happy being the way he is. Great read!
Btw at this rate he is going to drag a passed out bride up to the alter I wonder how he is going to explain that
Take care
nckw
27th Aug 2006, 10:30 AM
I just found this story and ıts lovely
Elliot is sooo handsome and cutee
melanie dont deserve her that girl shes urgh ı hope elliot understand how melanie is
.~*Iris*~.
27th Aug 2006, 10:38 AM
grrrrrrrr! I HATE HER!!
ELLIOT!! WAKE UP!!
*shakes Elliot like crazy and slaps him right in the face*
shakazulu
27th Aug 2006, 11:27 AM
elliot definately has a case of the rose tinted glasses doesnt he, poor lad, i think melonie should be abducted mwahahahaha
Dusica_SC
27th Aug 2006, 11:33 AM
Elliot is sooooo blind, he is starting to annoy me sooo bad. *grrrr* Wake up, damn it!
littleoldme
27th Aug 2006, 11:52 AM
Hey im reading it for thew first time, its a great story!!!!!!!
WHERE??!?!?!??? DID U FIND ALL HER CLOTHES I LOVE THEM!
kimussims
27th Aug 2006, 11:54 AM
Oh no not pink! What on earth was he thinking when he agreed to pink!
Great update as usual :D
simsfanforever99
27th Aug 2006, 12:05 PM
so will we get the wedding chappie today? or does it just say that on the invetation?
Fullmoon Lupin
27th Aug 2006, 12:22 PM
Go Mia! Elliot is so... pathetic. But I love this chapter!
SongBirdWVU
27th Aug 2006, 02:46 PM
I hope she pukes everywhere and he dumps her, hahah!
Can't wait to see the wedding.. I HOPE that he sees the light before it's too late!!!
Vicci
27th Aug 2006, 03:07 PM
As it says before, do we get it today at 4?! Or 4pm your time in America maybe? ^^
obssessed-with-sims2
27th Aug 2006, 04:11 PM
This story is so amazing lol, i bet they will get to the altar and then all those guys the *bleep* hehe has been seeing will turn up be like OMG I'm ur boyfriend not him lol! :bump:
sweetbabyhnd
27th Aug 2006, 05:05 PM
i love this story
miacovaspet
27th Aug 2006, 06:20 PM
Hi guys! You know I usually respond to everyone who leaves feedback but today I've got to take my girls to get their hair cut for school and am running short on time. When I get back I'll get the next chapter up ;) It will be before or around 4:30PM my time, it's 10:20AM right now.
A couple of things -
I got a lot of Melanie's clothes from http://lliella.com/index.php?option=com_content&task=blogsection&id=5&Itemid=26 and http://www.4eversimfantasy.net/fashion.htm as well as http://www.modthesims2.com/ and http://www.thesimsresource.com/ in addition to quite a few others, if there is a specific outfit you would like me to look up I'll see if I can figure it out for you.
As I'm sure you all know by now there will be some sort of drama at the wedding but I'm not going to share just yet ;)
simsfanforever99
27th Aug 2006, 11:36 PM
i guess the update will come when i'm have freezing cold italian ice
miacovaspet
28th Aug 2006, 12:42 AM
Chapter 10 – The Wedding Day
Things base and vile, holding no quantity,
Love can transpose to form and dignity.
Love looks not with the eye, but with the mind,
And therefore is winged Cupid painted blind.
- by William Shakespeare –
It was our wedding day, I stood there in front of the congregation with the officiate behind me and the wedding party to either side of me. I knew the other people were there but to me they were just part of the landscaping my eyes were drilling holes on the spot where my bride would walk down the aisle and into my life forever. Time stood still, I could neither see nor hear anything, only one thing was going to shatter my reverie, the sight of Melanie coming toward me.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65837090.EDwE1h1q.1Wedding.jpg
Suddenly she appeared, with her father at her side.
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She was so far away from me, I longed to touch her alabaster skin, to feel her warmth in my arms, to get this day over with and move on to our life together as man and wife! As if in slow motion she came toward me, a vision of loveliness in white, floating across the ground as if she were an angel.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65837092.dULN66mU.3Wedding.jpg
I gazed at her beautiful smiling face, such perfection I was sure to never find again, nothing in the world could possibly compare to the sight of my bride on this day of days, our wedding day.
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Her father delivered her to me, she was finally standing in front of me, within reaching distance of my eager hands. Who was I to deserve this goddess, this image of perfection?
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I vaguely heard the officiate ask us to hold hands as he began the ceremony. “We are gathered her to witness the joining of Elliott Gabriel Henry to Melanie Ann Howard. In holy matrimony. Marriage is a commitment to love, honor and cherish each other through thick and thin. Marriage means a life-long service to each other and dedication to the relationship of husband and wife above all others.”
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65837095.ux1Tboq4.6Wedding.jpg
The officiate continued to talk about marriage, love and commitment, I’m not entirely sure what exactly he said, I was lost in the big pools of green shining out of my darling’s face as she gazed at me with a soft, slight smile on her face.
http://i.pbase.com/o4/96/625796/1/65837096.WsH1PMOQ.7Wedding.jpg
I came out of my quest to memorize Melanie’s eyes in time to hear, ”If there is anyone here who has an objection as to why these two shall not be joined as man and wife please state your objections at this time”
xgrrlx
28th Aug 2006, 12:50 AM
I do I do! I object!
SongBirdWVU
28th Aug 2006, 01:05 AM
Me too!!! Oh God, let something save him!!!!
simsfanforever99
28th Aug 2006, 01:07 AM
*tabs piano* DUN DUN DUN DUN!
Rad Fad
28th Aug 2006, 01:12 AM
Ahh! SNAP PUT OF IT ELLIOTT!!! KICK HER TO THE CURB!
realmask316
28th Aug 2006, 02:02 AM
This woul be a good time for Nina C. to run in shouting "wait I have his love child!" or for some unnamed man to walk in with 30 or so kids and say "take your hands off my wife!"
Or an alien abduction
OK fine I object!
:P
Take Care
Elyssa
28th Aug 2006, 02:32 AM
Oh man, I hope Elliot's sister and Mom and Dad and the 25 love children and boyfriends and Jerry Springer all stand up and object!
I love this story like...well like my husband loves cake.
(I'm not picking on fat kids today.)
Captain THPS4
28th Aug 2006, 02:52 AM
Darn it a cliffhanger! It seems obvious now that someone will object. Can't wait to see what happens next!
gaeadaraza
28th Aug 2006, 05:55 AM
The crowd stands in silence...
well actually, the readers wait in silence.
Hmmmnnn...i like the alien abduction thing. Maybe an alien will come through and object and take her away!!!! OR
maybe she'll faint at the last minute because she is pregnant with another guy's baby...
I can't wait!!! UPDATE UPDATE!!!!
nckw
28th Aug 2006, 08:50 AM
a cliffhanger
great update
is elliot downloadable
shakazulu
28th Aug 2006, 10:10 AM
i object on the grounds that she is a horrible flirt, and he deserves better
ok abduct her
GrimmieTheReaper
28th Aug 2006, 11:55 AM
I object!I object!
Elliot, save yourself when you still have a chance for that!
kimussims
28th Aug 2006, 12:56 PM
I OBJECT!
Really I do, argh! don't marry her!!
Oh the suspense *faints* :P
fleesh
28th Aug 2006, 04:00 PM
this is scary...i am wearing basicly the same clothes as her AND i have the same hair as her weird huh?
angelyana
28th Aug 2006, 04:10 PM
Are you wearing a wedding dress?! o.O
.~*Iris*~.
28th Aug 2006, 05:14 PM
looool! (to angelyana) that's what I was askingt myself too and I....
Wait there are more important things now....
I OBJECT!!
*twenty cameras come out of nowhere and some random guy comes up to Elliot and says : "well thank you for contributing in the show "How stupidly and insanely far would a man go to please a woman"." he looks at Melanie and says to her : "Ok hon, you're done now, get the check in my office on tuesday" and Melanie runs happily away, leaving poor Elliot miserable and alone and... wait alone? YES NO MORE MELANIE! YOU AREE FREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!*
miacovaspet
28th Aug 2006, 05:56 PM
Oh, what a wonderful repsonse to this chapter! Thank you all so much :D
I love your suggestions....
Abducted
Boyfriends, Jerry Springer and love children
Pregnancy
Even a reality show!
Writing this story is so much fun and you all make it more fun!
Elliott can be downloaded here: http://www.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?t=184718
Melanie can be downloaded here: http://www.modthesims2.com/showthread.php?t=185537
You can expect the next chapter today sometime.
Jasmin_SC
28th Aug 2006, 06:27 PM
Oh I have a few plans with Melanie *Evil laugh*
Maybe, MELANIE will object and accuse Elliot of cheating on her!
Maybe she will rip off a mask and tell him she's actually a boy in disguise, (that would be funny, if not creepy)
Maybe the police turn up and arrest melanie for a murder, that she did or did not commit,
OHH THE POSSIBILITIES ARE ENDLESS.
miacovaspet
28th Aug 2006, 07:34 PM
Chapter 11 – Wedded Bliss is Fiction
”You wondered how you’d make it through. I wondered what was wrong with you. Because how could you give your love to someone else, yet share your dreams with me? Sometimes the only thing you’re looking for, is the one thing you can’t see.”
- Vanessa Williams -
As soon as the officiate uttered the words ”If there is anyone here who has an objection as to why these two shall not be joined as man and wife please state your objections at this time” I heard a small sound from the back of the congregation. Looking up I saw Darren standing there, “how dare he crash our wedding, the snake,” I thought to myself. Darren raised his hand and said in halting, unsure voice, “I object.” He didn’t stop his stupidness there, but continued on, “Elliott, please don’t do this, she doesn’t deserve you, and you need someone in your life that will be faithful to you!” I heard murmuring coming from the guests and saw Melanie’s parent’s start to get up from their seats. Melanie gasped and swayed weakly against me and appeared she was going to faint. I myself felt my stomach heaving, as if in an attempt to leave my body. Turning to my cousin Corey, my best man I said through my teeth, “will you please get him out of here?”
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Before Corey could move another man stood up, he looked vaguely familiar, I think Melanie had invited him over to my place at one point. Relief shot through me, this man was going to remove Darren for me. Imagine my shock when instead of assisting Darren from the premises he said in a loud, obnoxious voice, “Melanie, don’t get hitched to this guy, I can give you everything and more! Why would you want to marry this dweeb? He’s not man enough for you!”
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I was shocked!! Melanie looked liked a frightened rabbit with no where to go, she kept squeaking as if she was trying to say something. People were standing up from their seats, heads swiveling back and forth as their gaze kept switching from my bride and me to the two men.
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It wasn’t over! The elation I felt just a few moments earlier was now anguish, like a hot knife through my heart as a third man stood up and said to the second, “you, what do you mean ‘you can give her everything’? She is in love with me and I with her!” Turning to look at Melanie he said, “Melanie, please don’t marry this man, I love you with all my heart and will make a wonderful husband to you!”
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My stomach had now made its exit from my body; in its place was a massive pit of acid ready to deliver itself onto my shoes at any moment. I felt as if I was surely going to be sick right there in the middle of the worst moment of my life. My wedding was ruined; my bride was obviously not the person I thought she was. I turned to her to ask what in the world was going on when I heard a howling from behind me, shifting my body back around I looked down the aisle to see a man drop to his knees and say with a haunted voice, “Melanie, I believed you when you said you were just marrying Elliott for his money and then we could live in Mexico together but now I see you have been with other men and have been lying to me, did you ever intend on going away with me?” This man was clearly in agony and so pathetic that I almost felt sorry for him….that feeling was quickly substituted with the urge to replace his nose with my fist!
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I did the only thing I could think of, I threw my head back and screamed! This was some sort of bad dream; it had to be this could not be happening in real life! But it was real and I could no longer deny the proof that was glaringly in front of me, Melanie was cheating on me! And not just with one man, but three or more, were there others as well? She didn’t love me as I had thought, as I had loved her! The agony I felt at the notion was overwhelming! I screamed the scream of a man who has just lost his soul with no possible way of returning it to his body.
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All pandemonium broke loose, through my blurry vision I saw wedding guests yelling at each other. I think I even saw my sister landing a punch or two on pathetic guy! My mother was confronting Melanie who was trying to make a hasty escape. The wedding party was preparing themselves to defend me. Melanie’s parents were shamefacedly looking around for some way to remove themselves from the chaos without being noticed.
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The earth started to sway beneath my feet, the noise of the disaster that used to be my wedding sounded as if it was coming into to my ears through cheesecloth. My heart was beating so fast I felt like a gerbil on a wheel had taken residence in my chest. Clenching my fists I realized my palms were clammy and sweaty. The last thing I remember seeing were the worried faces of my mom and dad…
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…as I felt myself falling helplessly to the ground. Blissful, peaceful, welcomed blackness swelled around me. Thoughts, sounds, sights all faded away to nothing.
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rome_raven
28th Aug 2006, 07:42 PM
FINALLY! Someone objected (okay, so like 4 people did)!!! Sorry for you pain Elliot but this was very much needed.
LyricLee
28th Aug 2006, 07:52 PM
omg my poor elliott!!!
PrettySim_SC
28th Aug 2006, 07:54 PM
Yay! Yay! Yay!
Rad Fad
28th Aug 2006, 08:00 PM
Yeah!!! Now that's what I'm talking about!
zizismommy_SC
28th Aug 2006, 08:06 PM
Wow!! Just got into this, and this is probably the best story for this challenge i've read. Good job.
.~*Iris*~.
28th Aug 2006, 08:17 PM
Ok now I have to say that ALL the pictures are amazing and all the expressions are really awsome, what a great job you did in this chapter! and....
FINALLY!!!!!!!!!!!
err... Elliot? wake up its all over! the devil is gone!
hockeystatqueen_SC
28th Aug 2006, 08:29 PM
Great chapter!
You definitely deserve the featured story award!! :D
kimussims
28th Aug 2006, 08:31 PM
Oooo I was thinking it would be him to object but I couldn't for the life of me remember his name, and I was obviously too lazy to look :)
I hate to sound mean but yay!! Poor Elliot though, I could slap Melanie silly!
Luthiies
28th Aug 2006, 08:47 PM
Slap Slap Slap Slap Melanie !
Poor Eliott, he didn't deserve this but at least with all the problems maybe someone would forget he was wearing a pink tuxedo !
obssessed-with-sims2
28th Aug 2006, 09:25 PM
Yay i got it right lol, amazing chapter. :howdy:
LadySwig
28th Aug 2006, 09:38 PM
Yes finally he sees her true colours!
Vicci
28th Aug 2006, 09:59 PM
Great update! I feel sorry for Elliott though, he's so cute and obviously loved her! He's just a nice guy looking for love ;[
nerina
28th Aug 2006, 10:10 PM
Great chapter! pooer Elliott, but this really is for the best! He understood what kind of girl she is!
shakazulu
28th Aug 2006, 10:12 PM
aww poor elliot, its a shame he had to see it this way, but he has his friends and cousin who will look after him, poor lad
find a nice girl elliot
miacovaspet
28th Aug 2006, 10:29 PM
Oh, thanks for all the quick feedback :D
I'm so glad this chapter was a hit, I know it was a long time in leading up to it but I wanted to make sure I did enough chacter and storyline building before going on to the next stage in Elliott's life.
I have to share something funny....
When I was getting all the guests transported to the lot and changed for the wedding Darren kept walking by, he must have done it 4 or 5 times, lol. Sometimes he would stop in front of the lot and make the "angry" pose and sometimes he would wave. Just as I was getting ready to take the shot of the guy with the do-rag on he appeared again and this time he walked into the wedding area, I suppose because that's were everyone was, and waved. I thought it was hilarious that he showed up to object at the perfect time and obviously wanted to be part of the chapter. He was the only sim on the lot that I wasn't controlling, lol.
gaeadaraza
28th Aug 2006, 10:40 PM
OMG!! that was an awesome chapter. I love the pictures. I especially loved # 6.... (gives everyone a chance to scroll back)
He's like "Why?!!!? No Why!!??!!" And Melanie looks like she's trying to break camp! That was a great capture! :beer: Man, don't you just wish we coulda been there to "accidentally" trip Melanie as she tried to run out? Ooooh - Is Eliott going to go crazy and kill her and all the other guys??? That would be great - right? Anyone with me?.... :agree:
realmask316
29th Aug 2006, 01:10 AM
Yippie now its time for an old fashion tar and feathering! Don't worry Elliott is passed out he won't know. But get the ring first Elliott could use it to pay for therapy!
Oh wait! What if Melanie has multiple personality disorder!
Gee I have thought so mean of the mentally ill forgive me
Take Care
angelyana
29th Aug 2006, 01:16 AM
Tehe...this is funny but sad -_- it makes me wanna cry c> *tear tear* C> (those are tear drops) Anyhoo..keep writing!
SongBirdWVU
29th Aug 2006, 01:33 AM
Poor dear, but at least he didn't marry her!!! I hope he finds a GOOD girl soon!
miacovaspet
29th Aug 2006, 02:42 AM
Gaeadaraza - Thanks for the compliments on the photos :D I really try hard to get them just right, sometimes it takes forever to get everybody to do what I want. I spend a lot of time in slowmotion, lol.
Realmask - RFLMAO! Oh my gosh, that part about getting the ring is too funny! Rest your mind at ease, Melanie doesn't have MPD, she's just not very nice :)
Angelyana - Oh my, please don't cry, it's really for the best that Elliott learned before he got married!
Songbird - I too am hoping he finds the right girl for him!
Elyssa
29th Aug 2006, 02:50 AM
Where was Jerry Springer?!??!!?
LOL Hey I was almost right :) I still think Jerry and the love children would've fit right in the riot ;)
Great chapter!!!! I love it!!
Hana_Chann
29th Aug 2006, 03:00 AM
Poor Elliot....at least now he knows the truth
auroraspirit
29th Aug 2006, 06:19 AM
WOW, massive updates, I guess this means a fresh start for Elliot now.
Auroraspirit :angel:
Dusica_SC
29th Aug 2006, 07:53 AM
If Elliot wakes up, and forgives Melanie..... something nasty will happen. :censored:
JustALittleSimGirl
29th Aug 2006, 09:30 AM
Omg brill chapter, if feel so sorry for elliot though, but i like darren, i thought that he was very brave to show up and crash his best m8s (or x bst m8s) wedding! But elliot didnt listen to people before so i guess its good its hit him.
GrimmieTheReaper
29th Aug 2006, 01:22 PM
Ding dong, the witch is gone!Yay!
But aww, poor Elliot.
I'm hooked up.
miacovaspet
29th Aug 2006, 04:09 PM
Elyssa - Unfortunatley Jerry wasn't able to fit the Henry wedding into his very busy schedule :D
Hana - Yes, he knows the truth....poor guy!
Auroraspirit - Yes, a fresh start, hopefully he can pull his life together and move on now!
Dusica - I'll remember to keep Elliott far away from you if he forgives her! LOL
JustALittleSimGirl - Thank you and yes, it was tough for people to get through to Elliott but thank goodness they did in time!
Grimmie - Yup, she's gone.....or is she? ;)
AnyPika
29th Aug 2006, 05:27 PM
She's gone! I hope he's not gonna believe her excuses, if she doesn't manage to escape :einstein ...
Captain THPS4
29th Aug 2006, 05:46 PM
Hah, I knew that Melanie's other boyfriends would object, though I do admit that I didn't expect Darren to come. That one pic from a few chapters back that had Elliot punching the punching bag and Melanie checking out another guy in the gym really comes to mind now. I wonder what will happen in the next chapter...is Elliot going to end up in the hospital since he fainted?
GrimmieTheReaper
29th Aug 2006, 06:54 PM
Grimmie - Yup, she's gone.....or is she?
^Oh no!All the suspence! :question :rofl:
cory_g
29th Aug 2006, 07:08 PM
This story is just lovely! :D This is the best word to describe it! First of all, I like all the quotes that you put in before each update, then I just love the way Elliot thinks! :lol: He is so passionate, but naive...I just loved all the parts in which he describes Melanie, they are hilarious in a sarcastic way!
I'm really sorry for being so shallow! I usually check stories out either when I see they are popular and get many answers or they get featured...this is how I checked out your story and I don't regret having done this ;) Well done on it!
I hope you update soon, I can't wait to see whether Elliot's eyes have really been opened or he actually still thinks that "lovely" Melanie is the most innocent being in the world :D
miacovaspet
29th Aug 2006, 07:59 PM
Anypika - Hopefully Melanie will have the sense to step out gracefully...although, that's really not her style now is it?
Captain - I didn't expect Darren to come to the wedding either but his timing was impeccable.
Grimmie - hehehe, I guess I'm a bit of a sadist :eviltongu
Cory g - I'm so glad you visited my story! Thank you for the wonderful compliments!
Good news :) I figured out if I check this thread several times a day I can respond to each person who leaves feedback :Pimp:
I will try to update tonight or in the morning. I'm planning on taking my photos tonight.
sims2addict01
30th Aug 2006, 02:49 AM
Oh my goodness...GREAT STORY!!!!!! Keep it coming!
miacovaspet
30th Aug 2006, 05:53 AM
Thanks Sims2addict I'm working on my photos tonight so I should have an update in the morning :)
miacovaspet
31st Aug 2006, 04:27 AM
Chapter 12 – Grief is a process
There are things that we don't want to happen but have to accept, things we don't want to know but have to learn, and people we can't live without but have to let go.
- Author Unknown -
My head was hurting, it felt like something was using an anvil in an attempt to separate my brain from its resting place! After taking a deep breath I realized I could hear my parents quietly talking. My mom’s voice registered first, “he just moved, is he coming to?” Then my dad’s voice, “Doctor, is he regaining conscious?” Doctor?? I’ve always been healthy as a horse, why were they talking about a doctor? A strange voice came through the painful fog between my ears, “Elliott, can you hear me?” “mmmuh”, I mumbled, the words weren’t coming out. My mouth felt like it had old, dry cobwebs in it. I tried again, “uh hu” ok, that was getting a little better. Strange Voice again, “Elliott, can you open your eyes? Hm, now that was a good question. My eyes, let me think about that for a moment….it can’t be that hard to open one’s eyes, after all we blink hundreds of times per day don’t we? Why were mine glued shut? Oh, let’s try that again, left eye open, it was almost as if I had to actually tell my body to respond. There we go, I felt the glue giving way and my eyelid start to move. I managed to get both eyes open ever so slightly.
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And immediately slammed them shut again. Who the heck was that! “Wwwhere ammm ah” I asked, very proud of myself for actually getting words out (ok, they weren’t quite right but I was hoping they would be understood)! “Elliott, you’re at Wickering Place General,” strange voice said. WHAT! In the hospital, why was I in the hospital? And why did I feel so weird, my body slow to respond, my head beginning to pound as if someone were taking a hammer to that anvil! Ok, so that strange voice must belong to a doctor. Good, maybe he could get me some water! “Cccannn I haaavvvee ssomme wwwaattteerr,” I stuttered. Dr. Strange Voice said, “Yes, I’ll ring for the nurse”. I heard my parent’s again, talking softly to each other in relieved voices, I couldn’t quite make out what they were saying but it was something like, “3 weeks, it was so scary!” Dr. Strange Voice said, “Elliott, I’m Dr. Larret, can you tell me how many fingers I’m holding up?” Didn’t the evil doctor see I was in pain and my eyes were not cooperating with me? Or was he just interested torturing me? Having been taught good manners by my parents I obeyed the doctor and opened my eyes far enough to see the hand he was holding in front of my face. “Three” I said. “Very good,” said Dr. Stran…err…Larret. “And can you tell me what year it is,” he asked. What was this the great inquisition? “2006,” I stated with a sigh, maybe he’s a bit daft and really didn’t know. “Excellent,” he said. Mr. and Mrs. Henry it appears that Elliott will be fine. He then turned to me and said, “welcome back Elliott”.
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A nurse came in to give me some more than welcome water. My parents came over to the bed I was lying in and told me how glad they were to see me awake. I asked if I had been in an accident, they told me no, but I had fallen down. I talked with them for a bit, asking where my sister was and why I was there, when I asked the last question they looked cautiously at the doctor who shook his head, what were they hiding from me? By now I was starting to feel a little better, the pain in my head had subsided a bit and my eyes and voice appeared to be fully functional. I didn’t need to be in bed; I wasn’t one to just lie around. I threw back the covers and slowly got out of bed.
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Ok, maybe not such a good idea! My legs were shaky and the room was spinning! Sitting back down on the bed quickly centered the spinning room and myself. I was determined to try it again. I attempted to stand again, ah-ha! This time it worked, I was quite pleased with myself and started to ask my mom where my clothes were. All of a sudden it hit me….I had to get to my wedding! I was going to be late! Did I miss it completely? I turned asked my parents what day it was and if I missed the wedding, panic was starting to rise inside me, poor Melanie, what must she be thinking. Hm, where was Melanie anyways? Something inside my brain snapped right then. Like a tidal wave the memories came rushing back….the horrible pink tux, the objections, the declarations of love from multiple men….oh my gosh she cheated on me! Raw searing pain hit my stomach and erupted like a volcano through my body and found it’s way out by route of my eyes. Hot tears landed on my cheeks as I realized what had happened!
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As I cried like a wounded child I began to think to myself, maybe it wasn’t true! Maybe they were lying! Could it be some sort of twisted joke or set up? Was someone out to get Melanie and found the worst way to hurt her, on her wedding day? I thought back over the last two years or so. Had I been given any clues that would tell me she was cheating on me. I realized I had to say the answer to that question was yes, an emphatic YES! That no good two timing $%#^&!! Thank god I had learned of this before we actually finished the ceremony! I was angry! Very angry!
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She had taken nearly two years of my life, wound me around her finger and wrapped me in her web of deceit. As if that wasn’t enough, was prepared to marry me and continue her torrid affairs! If pathetic guy was to be believed (and why would he lie?) she was just marrying me for my money! Little did she know the joke would have been on her, because of her influence I didn’t have much of my nest egg left, certainly not enough for a gold-digging harlot! In rapid succession the memories and thoughts ran through my head like burglars trying to escape the authorities. These were quickly followed by the realization that my dreams of a wife and a happy family had been dashed off a proverbial cliff onto sharp rocks below. Dead, gone, kaput! I leaned against the wall and slid down.
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What was I going to do now?
The hottest love has the coldest end.
- Socrates -
hockeystatqueen_SC
31st Aug 2006, 04:39 AM
Bravo!
I loved your creative use of adjectives in the descriptions of how he felt!
It's like I could just feel how he felt! :cry:
PrettySim_SC
31st Aug 2006, 04:41 AM
Oh my oh my great update!
miacovaspet
31st Aug 2006, 04:41 AM
Hockeystatqueen - Thanks yay! I was successful in my attempt to throughly describe his pain :D (um, maybe I shouldn't be grinning at that...poor guy!)
Prettysim - Thanks to you as well :)
auroraspirit
31st Aug 2006, 04:50 AM
Someone give Elliot a hug lol.
Auroraspirit :angel:
LyricLee
31st Aug 2006, 04:53 AM
man i love you but i Love him more!!!
Captain THPS4
31st Aug 2006, 04:58 AM
Great update! When I first read the scentence "had I been given any clues that would tell me she was cheating on me," I almost thought Elliot would think the answer was no, thank goodness it was the other way around. :blink:
gaeadaraza
31st Aug 2006, 05:14 AM
Aww poor guy. But great update!
MzSera
31st Aug 2006, 06:35 AM
ohh!! i just read the whole story!! love it omg i feel so sorry for elliot :( i just want to hug him!
miacovaspet
31st Aug 2006, 06:48 AM
Auroraspirit - I would give him hug if I could...but it's hard to hug pixels, lol. I guess I'll have to get some other pixelated person to do it by proxy :)
LyricLee - Awww, I thank you and Elliott thanks you!
Captian - You know, I've been writing about Elliott with his "rose colored glasses" on for so long it was almost difficult to get that setence out....aren't you glad I did :D
Gaeadaraza - Thank you :)
Sera - I'm so glad you found the story and enjoyed it! I hope you stick around for the rest.
bambibaby
31st Aug 2006, 07:38 AM
I love this story, I read all 9 pages just now. It's really good.
auroraspirit
31st Aug 2006, 08:58 AM
That sounds good Mia, I think Melanie should start by giving him an apologetic hug, or actually that might make Elliot explode lol :mean: :flame: :madashel:
We can start on finding his internet lover :lovestruc I guess this is where the adventure begins Mia.
Auroraspirit :angel:
Dusica_SC
31st Aug 2006, 09:07 AM
Awesome update mia! Its good that he feels this way, he finally opened his eyes, and truth hurts. :einstein:
Rock Chick_SC
31st Aug 2006, 09:19 AM
Great story, just read it all in one go...hope to read more very soon ! Thanks!
shakazulu
31st Aug 2006, 11:07 AM
poor elliot, he needs a snuggle, well, he's been through upset and anger, now hes in cuckoo land but i reckon when he makes it back, step 3 is always revenge, i wonder what will happen next, great update mia
nckw
31st Aug 2006, 11:12 AM
great update
poor elliott
"Didn’t the evil doctor see I was in pain and my eyes were not cooperating with me? Or was he just interested torturing me?" that made fall of my chair LOL!
GrimmieTheReaper
31st Aug 2006, 12:40 PM
Great update, once again.
Poor guy, he gave Melanie 2 years from his life.. and thats 2 years too much anyway.
cory_g
31st Aug 2006, 01:38 PM
Your story just cracks me up with every chapter :D But still...poor guy! At least he's over with Melanie...
Vicci
31st Aug 2006, 03:08 PM
Aww, poor Elliott. I hope the internet romance will begin soon! I'm looking forward to it and I hope the next one is nicer =[
nerina
31st Aug 2006, 03:19 PM
Poor Elliott! But I'm glad he's finally angry, this is the first step.
kimussims
31st Aug 2006, 05:17 PM
*gives Elliot a hug* The poor guy.
Although I have a sneaky feeling we haven't seen the last of Melanie.
.~*Iris*~.
31st Aug 2006, 07:16 PM
AWWW Elliot!!!
I told you she was a %*^$#$@%!! but you were blind!
*hugs Elliot* it's ok, you'll find a wonderful person to share your life with soon enough!
awsome chapter miacovaspet, I loved the details in your descriptions like when he was waking up , and the sarcasm about the doctor lol!
SongBirdWVU
1st Sep 2006, 12:59 AM
Poor Elliot... I hope he manages to recover. Great update.. can't wait for the next one!
miacovaspet
1st Sep 2006, 03:52 AM
Bambibaby - I'm so glad you found it, thank you :)
Auroraspirit - I don't imagine that Melanie would dare show her face around Elliott or his family! I'm excited to see him moving on as well!
Dusica - Thank you, and I agree it's good to see he's finally aware of what's going on!
Rock Chick - Thank you, I'm so happy you took the time to read the whole story!
Shakazulu - "cuckoo land" lmao!! Hm, revenge....might be something to that :D
nckw - Thank you and I'm flattered that my words made you laugh :)
Grimmie - I agree, he threw away those two years on Melanie, two years is a long time in a sim's life!
Cory g - I try to make parts of it funny so it's good to hear that my endeavors aren't in vain!
Vicci - I hope the internet romance will come quickly as well! As I've learned though while writing this story the events seem to come as they will. I was originally thinking that it would only take 4-5 chapters to get to this point but we're at 12 now :blink:
Kimussims - You might be right, it's possible that we haven't seen the last of Melanie ;)
Iris - Thank you for pointing out the sarcasm about the doctor, I had fun writing that!
SongBird - Thank you! Elliott's managed to survive almost two years with that sadist of a girlfriend, I think he'll make it through this :)
missd735
1st Sep 2006, 08:30 AM
Awesome story! I'm so glad to have come across this thread. I'll be checking for updates.
miacovaspet
1st Sep 2006, 12:31 PM
Thanks Missd735! I'll get an update up tomorrow...well, technically it is tomorrow but I just haven't gone to bed yet. I got all my photos taken tonight, just have to write the chapter :)
realmask316
1st Sep 2006, 08:20 PM
Poor guy, you know he might like the doc?
Anyway sorry its been a bit to come over and say this is great, been busy but you know that :)
So is it tomorrow yet?
Take Care
miacovaspet
2nd Sep 2006, 02:40 AM
Realmask - Yes, indeed, it is tomorrow :D I'm a little later than I wanted but the story is chapter is coming in just a few moments!
miacovaspet
2nd Sep 2006, 02:47 AM
Chapter 13 – No Hope
There are things that we don't want to happen but have to accept, things we don't want to know but have to learn, and people we can't live without but have to let go.
- Author Unknown –
I was sitting in my hospital room minding my own business, wallowing in self-pity and pain when a nurse came in. I suppose she was nice…I think they thought that she would be able to get me off the floor. I wasn’t moving for anybody! I was going to spend the rest of my life there. What reason did I have to move? No wife, no family, nothing. Ok, I suppose that’s a little dramatic but seriously, I didn’t want to do anything but sit there and let the world go by.
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Apparently she gave up because I heard the nurse talking to the doctor, saying something about a hopeless case. Was she talking about me? Probably, I was hopeless. No hope for the future, no hope for the present, no hope at all.
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The doctor prescribed a sedative and then a battery of tests. First they plopped me in a wheel chair and sent me with an orderly to get an MRI.
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After enduring the thrilling MRI machine they sent me to get an ultrasound. What the heck were they expecting to find with an ultrasound? At some point during the never-ending ultrasound I think I must have passed out again.
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I guess the ultrasound was a bust because when I came to I found myself in a dark, cold room lying on an uncomfortable x-ray table. I could hear the doctor on the other side of the partition saying, “hm, well, uh, hm.” I’m not sure where this guy got his medical license but he didn’t seem to know what he was doing!
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My weary body was again placed in a wheelchair. I was wheeled to a room where my parent’s were waiting. The doctor began talking in quiet tones. I ignored them all I just wanted to disappear! As the doctor’s voice got louder I started to pay attention to what he was saying, “…hysterical depression…mental ward…psychiatrist.” Was he talking about me, were they sending me to the mental ward? I remember wondering, “should I be concerned?” I supposed I should have been concerned, but right then I really didn’t care! All that mattered was that I had to escape the memories, the pain and my own stupidity. Whatever they did to me I deserved it.
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I quickly realized exactly what the doctor was talking about after the orderly wheeled me to my new home.
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Wait a minute! I wanted everyone to leave me alone, but not this alone!
applesoveroranges
2nd Sep 2006, 03:16 AM
Whoa that sucks! >< Well Elliot, if you'd screwed you head on right in the first place, you wouldn't be there! Wow he's just so gulliable sometimes ~.~
Great update~! ^.^
xgrrlx
2nd Sep 2006, 03:23 AM
Oh dear...
His parents let that happen? He's just upset, geesh!
hockeystatqueen_SC
2nd Sep 2006, 04:06 AM
Chapter 13 – No Hope
Wait a minute! I wanted everyone to leave me alone, but not this alone!
:lol:
Hilarious!
Poor thing, though. :(
realmask316
2nd Sep 2006, 04:18 AM
Elliott needs the love doctor have your people call my people we will set it up!
Elliott listen she is not the last beautiful girl and even if she was the last beautiful girl...oh geee now I am quoting matchbox twenty songs.
Great update unexpected which is a good thing!
Take Care
GrimmieTheReaper
2nd Sep 2006, 09:20 AM
Wait a minute! I wanted everyone to leave me alone, but not this alone!
^Made me laugh :D
I know, I shouldn't laugh..
Love this story, it's funny and sort of sad at the same time.
miacovaspet
2nd Sep 2006, 09:37 AM
It's the middle of the night for me, my husband is sleeping behind me and you guys have me laughing out loud (really!).
Oh my gosh! Thank you so much for the comments and the laughs :D
Apples - "Well Elliot, if you'd screwed you head on right in the first place, you wouldn't be there!" Too funny! I love it :D
Hockeystatqueen - Thank you :)
Realmask - The love doctor, that's a great idea! I know everyone was expecting that he would move onto the internet thing right away but I think he needs to deal with his greif first....come on, this is Elliott we're talking about, he's really not all that self aware (or aware of what's happening around him, lol)
Grimmie - It's ok to laugh :)
xgrrlx - Yes, they seemed a bit upset but obviously didn't protest too loudly!
auroraspirit
2nd Sep 2006, 09:40 AM
Oh dear Elliot is looking so good :sick:
Auroraspirit :angel:
Muscat
2nd Sep 2006, 09:43 AM
poor Elliott.I must create a wonderful simwoman for him who will hug him all the time :D(i downloaded him).great update!
melanie_SC
2nd Sep 2006, 09:56 AM
The last picture looked so good :) Nice storyline :D
shakazulu
2nd Sep 2006, 10:16 AM
how could this happen, from cuckoo's nest to padded cell, Elliot wake up and smell the coffee ( in your little plastic cup so you dont hurt yourself ). i cant believe his parents allowed him to be put in the mental ward, he is just upset really.
Vicci
2nd Sep 2006, 11:13 AM
Maybe his parents just want the best and beleive the doctors are trying to do their best to help him? Maybe they're taking it to the extremes, he has just been cheated on! Any normal person would get depressed for a while.
Great update, but poor Elliott. I'm sure he has hugs from all of us =D
Dusica_SC
2nd Sep 2006, 11:52 AM
Woah, now i relly feel sorry for the guy, i mean, give him some time, sheesh. :blink:
.~*Iris*~.
2nd Sep 2006, 12:14 PM
nooooooooooooooooooo!! Ellioooooooot!! aww poor guy he never did anything to anyone!
awsome update and again with the sarcasm about doctors! :D
PrettySim_SC
2nd Sep 2006, 02:57 PM
Aww. Oh my gosh. Maybe they'll give him a computer though...
kimussims
2nd Sep 2006, 03:54 PM
Mental? The poor thing, I'd be going mental stuck in a hospital *mumbles about how much I hate hospitals*
Aww I hope he makes a speedy recovery!
Captain THPS4
2nd Sep 2006, 05:04 PM
Poor Elliott! I guess that's what he gets for being so blind. Even just by the clothes that Melanie was wearing you could tell that she was cheating on him, and he still got a little too obsessed with her. Oh well, I hope he recovers soon! :stick:
miacovaspet
2nd Sep 2006, 10:54 PM
Auroraspirit - You're right, he looks like he's losing it doesn't he? :(
Muscat - Oh, that would be wonderful! He deserves to have a good, kind sim love him :)
Melanie - Thank you for the compliments!
Shakazulu - I loved that comment about the plastic cup so he wouldn't hurt himself :clap:
Vicci - Thanks! I'm sure his parent's just want what's best for him and I agree, they are probably trusting the medical professionals to do what's right.
Dusica - You're right, time might be all he needs to get better.
Iris - I know what you mean, he's so innocent in a little boy type of way, he doesn't deserve all this grief!
PrettySim - LOL, that would be great, wouldn't it? Give him a computer so he can find his love :)
Kimussims - I know what you mean about hospitals and I think Elliott shares our aversion to them!
Captain - "Obsessed" is the right word! He was obsessed with her for sure!
miacovaspet
2nd Sep 2006, 11:13 PM
Chapter 14 – Healing Begins
Author’s note: Phil Parsh from The Hidden Palace (http://forums.sims2community.com/showthread.php?t=20674) contest makes an appearance in this chapter. Phil is my husband’s self -sim can be downloaded here (http://www.insimenator.net/showthread.php?t=18231).
Give sorrow words; the grief that does not speak whispers the o'er-fraught heart and bids it break.
- William Shakespeare -
The very next day after I was placed in my cell….err…room. I was told that it was time to see my psychiatrist, Dr. Phil Parsh. When I got to Dr. Parsh’s office I admit, I was a bit standoffish. I was uneasy about talking to Dr. Parsh, I mean really, why did I need to see a psychiatrist? If they all left me alone (and I don’t mean in a padded room) I could just fade away to nothingness, that’s all I really wanted to do.
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Dr. Parsh quickly made me feel a little more at ease. He greeted me and welcomed me to his office. Looking around I saw the man really liked books; his walls were lined with bookcases. The room felt soothing somehow, like I was back in the Wickering Place library.
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Dr. Parsh invited me to have a seat; I looked around, unsure of where to sit. There was an office chair, an easy chair and a lounger. Hesitantly I choose the lounger. We started off by talking about my family and childhood, he also asked me questions about my job and what I liked to do during my free time. I was beginning to loosen up; I started thinking that it wasn’t so bad seeing a shrink.
Until he said, “So, Elliott, what brings you to psychiatric ward of Wickering Place General? My feelings about being at ease came to a screeching halt as I felt my entire body stiffen upon hearing that question! I knew we would have to talk about it, but I wasn’t ready! As pleasant as he seemed, I didn’t want to share my plight with a stranger! Dr. Parsh must have noticed my reluctance, he told me to take my time and let the words come out when they were ready.
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I started talking about Melanie, it was so hard to talk about, even saying her name was difficult, it somehow got stuck between my throat and my lips. I told him how we met. I talked about how our relationship progressed, and the disgusting way it ended. I even described her, it dawned on me as I was talking that I when I thought about her I didn’t picture her in the same way I used to.
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Dr. Parsh let me talk for a while. When I was done, I was exhausted, I was hoping that our session was over; I just wanted to go to bed and close my weary eyes, make all this pain go away. My wishes were not to be granted. Dr. Parsh said, “Elliott, what do you want to do with this pain, how do you imagine you might make it stop?”
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I closed my eyes for a long moment, in the comfort of darkness I thought about his question. I pictured myself on top of a cliff looking down onto jagged, treacherous rocks below. I thought about how easy it would be to step off that cliff and end the pain, the anguish, on the rocky surface below.
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I told the doctor what I was thinking. “But Elliott,” Dr. Parsh said calmly, “Why do you want to end your life? Were you the one who caused the pain? What did you do wrong that makes you want to take such drastic measures?” I contemplated this for a while, why were shrinks always asking questions, weren’t they supposed to be telling you what to do? Why did I want to throw myself off the cliff? “To end it,” I answered emphatically. I suddenly had the uncontrollable urge to jump up from my seat as I started to list the reasons why, “I didn’t see what was in front of my face the whole time! I trusted her! I let myself get played the entire time, like a puppet! I didn’t listen to the people who cared about me!”
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Dr. Parsh responded with, “End what, your life? Is that really the answer to your problems? Who caused you the pain? Think Elliott, do you really want to end your life? Wouldn’t it be better to place the blame on the person who caused you the pain? Yes, you weren’t seeing things clearly but that isn’t your fault Elliott, you were just being yourself. You have a trusting nature and you care about people, there is nothing wrong with that. Now try to picture what you would do if you were able to place the blame where it belongs, with Melanie.”
I stood there thinking for a long moment. What would I do? A small smile found it’s way to my lips for the first time in weeks as the thought took form in my mind.”
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“Now that’s more like it Elliott!” Dr. Parsh exclaimed in a pleased voice. “Elliott, just because you have thoughts about wanting to kick her off a cliff doesn’t make you a bad person, you can think these thoughts without acting on them.”
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Dr. Parsh continued, “now imagine Melanie is in front of you right now, you can confront her, tell her how she made you feel.” I didn’t have to think very long about it, I pictured her standing in front of me, I was telling her that I knew what type of person she was and how she made me feel, and that I wasn’t going to be her victim any longer!
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“Very good Elliott!” This is exactly what you need to do,” Dr. Parsh said. “Do not internalize the pain and blame, put it squarely where it belongs. You need to take this experience and learn from it, be aware of what is happening to you. Listen to what your family tells you, take it to heart and know that they want what’s best for you. I do not think you need to stay here in the hospital,” he said thoughtfully. “I’m going to recommend a treatment for you that might seem a bit radical at first but in the end you will be a new man, ready to re-start your life and able to cope with your problems in a mature responsible way.”
XsnowdropX
2nd Sep 2006, 11:24 PM
for some reaon dr parsh reminds me of doctor phil :smash: :P
anyway nice update (he so should kick her off that cliff)
miacovaspet
2nd Sep 2006, 11:28 PM
I know...I almost just called him "Dr. Phil" since Phil is his first name after all but decided not to...didn't want to make it so cliche, lol.
simsfanforever99
2nd Sep 2006, 11:34 PM
LOL , ROFL ok now all he has to do is find the women he truly loves and that loves him back and for real this time
PrettySim_SC
2nd Sep 2006, 11:56 PM
Yay! Kick her *** of that cliff!
applesoveroranges
3rd Sep 2006, 12:37 AM
Way to go Elliot! Whoo! I'm proud of you! ^.^
"in a mature responsible way" plegh! Now the next step is to take action -n-
realmask316
3rd Sep 2006, 12:53 AM
You know if Elliott wants I happen to know a nice looking girl sim with a gun who can, well you know take care of lifes little problems. She happens to be on vacation until Ch 2 so lots of free time if you want her :) The only downside would be is Elliott would have to take a very long vacation or uh well change his looks I know a rocking make-up women..
hehehe
Im teasing, I really like this update Elliott has a new life coming his way!
Take Care
LyricLee
3rd Sep 2006, 01:16 AM
Ya know if Elliot wants, I have an ice looking SELF SIM he can meet online LMAO... I love this story, You really do have us all in love with him.
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