View Full Version : The Stupid English Paper
23rd Nov 2006, 10:03 PM
Yeah. I like the title too. Anyway, this is a story about two of my favorite sims, Shae and Jill. Shaeís a third generation sim, and basically I love him. For a bit of a backstory, his father is a celebrity sim in my game, and has been since he was a teenager. That kind of just means that I take lots and lots of pictures of him and photoshoots. He has a full creativity bar though, and has had once since early teenager-hood (without cheats, yeah, his parents let him play with the xylophone A LOT.) His mom is a model Iíve used in many pictures. Jill is my self-sims daughter. Yes, I am a model. Just not as famous as the Britt in the story. Just clearing that all up before we start, and all of that does matter. *phew*
This is the exact reason why I hate English class, Mrs. Barrow. You make us do mindless work that I will never remember in about 4 weeks. Maybe more then that, I have no idea how long it will take you to correct these things. You tell us to tell you about our family. Everyone knows about my family. Open a tabloid and thereís a full story.
You see, I donít know if you know this (But judging from the paparazzi last parent teacher conference, Iím guessing you noticed.) but my dad and mom are pretty prominent figures in Hollywood. My dad, Fin Caldwell, has been a famous musician since he was 16. He was one of those teen heartthrobs; you probably had a picture of my dad on your wall. Creepy. Youíre also probably going to check right now too. Me and him are actually pretty close. I do wish heíd take his piercings out though. Itís weird being able to trade labret studs with your FATHER.
This is the picture you found on your wall, isnít it?
My mom? Sheís a supermodel. You know how guys my age sometimes have pictures hanging on their walls of chicks in fashion magazines? Yeah, if I do that, Iím probably putting up one of my momís co-workers. Even creepier then you crushing on my dad. Sheís always been a great mom though, weíve been really close. Sometimes sheís a little crazy, but, so isnít everyone, I guess.
And that is my little sister, Carrigan. I was 5 when she was born, so I donít remember much about life before I had to look out for her. Weíre actually pretty close, if thatís not beyond weird for a older brother and a sister. I can tell guys are going to be chasing after her in a few years though, theyíd better watch out. Iím kind of skinny, but I can punch real good. You should remember, Mrs. Barrow, when you had to break up that fight between me and that kid last year. Iím sorry for hitting your eye. I swear I thought you were him.
I also have a little brother named Foster. Heís still extremely young, heís not even a year old yet. I think my parents were just bored one day and decided it would be cool to have another kid running around, honestly. Itís a very big jump from having older kids to a baby randomly again. I donít even have a picture of him because when I ran up to his room to get a picture mom grabbed the camera and told me Iíd give him radiation that way. Mom didnít seem to care when she did an entire magazine spread with me the day I was born.
I figured youíd now want to see a picture of that. Yeah, I was pretty cute. Anyway, Iíll call this intro quits for now. Iíll show you a picture of my dog later. And talk about something eventful, hopefully. Hopefully I can introduce you to Jill. She better talk about me in her paper, swear to God, Jill. Youíre making her class do this too, right?
23rd Nov 2006, 10:15 PM
aaaah love it!! keep it up it's AWESOME!
"I swear to God, i thought you were him" Loooooooooooooooooooolll!!!
23rd Nov 2006, 10:16 PM
I like the beginning! I cn't wait till the action and stuff starts. <3
I'm really wanting more. ;]
23rd Nov 2006, 10:46 PM
Whoo. Ok. English paper. Do teachers get together and decide homework together? Because you should, this is the 4th paper I've had to write this week. And I have some hair styles to try.
Anyway, you know this already, but this is Jill. Jill Ford, daughter of Britt, yes the model, and Mark. We are supposed to write about our families, but I honestly don't want to. My family is known by everyone. Maybe not the right things, but they know of them.
My mom, Britt, is the famous one. I'm not getting into it. She's my mom, the whole fashion thing never really mattered to me.
My dad, Mark, however, is a detective. People thought it was weird that someone so normal was dating someone with a celebrity status, but, I think it was smart. They really love each other, you can tell.
I have two younger siblings, twins. The older one is Ryder, and the younger one is Stefy. They are honestly great kids, I'm proud of them. And yes, that's a little me in that picture. We were the cutest little kids I've ever seen!
And that's me. With one of my many hairstyles. I don't think I've gone more then 3 weeks with the same one. I don't know why, I just like to change my look. I know no matter what, one person won't judge me.
And that's my best friend, Shae. You obviously know we're best friends, since we're both constantly together. I know what you're thinking, girls best friends are supposed to be girls. If they are that close with a boy, something must be going on, right? Wrong. Shae's the only person who completly understands everything. His parents are in 'the buisness' too. We grew up together, our sisters are best friends too. And plus, he's way more girly then he's letting on. You've seen that hair. Do you know how long it takes him to do that? 45 minutes. Every morning. That's longer then it takes me to do mine, Mrs Barrows.
I hope this was good enough for this first part, just our introduction, right? Me and Shae are going to the bowling alley later tonight, I want to finish in time.
23rd Nov 2006, 10:47 PM
Wow, awesome start! I can't wait to read the rest of it! :)
24th Nov 2006, 08:59 AM
Its spoken in a teen way which I feel is good, its like as if we are reading someone's diary (although I could never do) Good job, keep it up Catwalk :)
24th Nov 2006, 09:21 AM
this is off to a good start, i really like it
25th Nov 2006, 05:45 AM
Thanks for all of the great feedback everyone! It's hard to try and make it obvious between either Jill or Shae's writing, but I think as time goes on it will make itself more noticable that Shae's usually dripping in sarcasm or saying something absolutly ridiculous. I hope. ^^; Next chapter will go up either tomorrow or sunday, I'm not sure if I'll have time to get the pictures tomorrow.
25th Nov 2006, 05:55 AM
geat start to your story, I like it lots:D
25th Nov 2006, 12:39 PM
Oooh, nice start, I really like it. I love how casually they both write, even though it's for an English essay-thing. :D Keep it up!
25th Nov 2006, 08:42 PM
I love it! Really awesome. Can't wait for the next update!
25th Nov 2006, 09:40 PM
Cant wait for the next update!!!!!!
26th Nov 2006, 09:32 PM
WHOO. Ok. So today was very exciting. It was my little brotherís birthday. He looks so much like my dad, itís crazy. Heís the only one of the three of us with Dadís hair color too. Thatís right, Iím a natural blonde. I figured you knew that by now, but, you know, whatever.
Also, Iíd like to point out that we have only a month until prom. And you gave us this nice project to do. I mean, this is actually kind of a cool one. You said we could write anything and everything we want to. I could basically go on a f-this rant, or just write down lyrics to a Sex Pistols song or something. But I wonít, because this is basically the only thing Iíve attempted to work on all year. Itís my end of the year present to you, Ms. Barrows.
So, yes, for promÖI dunno. I know Iím not supposed to be excited about these things, but I really am. I know who I want to go with me too. I think you know as well. Sheís only the most perfect girl in the world. NO ITS NOT YOU MRS BARROW YOU SNEAKY WOMAN YOU. Tried to pull a fast one on me, didnít you? But, in all seriousness, Iím terrified to ask her. Sheís only my best friend, weíve been that way since we were, hmm, 6 years old, and, OH YEAH Iíve had a crush on her since I was 11.
Could you possibly tell her for me? Scratch that, Iíll grow a pair and ask her next week.
By the way, here are those pictures I promised. Thatís Twinkle. No, I did not name my dog Twinkle. Carri did. Even though itís my dog. I hope mum and dad will let me bring her with me after we graduate. I might as well ask Twinkle to prom. Sheíd look cute in a dress and would probably just lick my shoes all night long.
This is also proof that my mom is off her nut. I was minding my own business, walking down the hallway, and that crazy woman throws a pillow at me. So, I pick it up, and she whips another out of nowhere and starts beating the life out of my nice hair. MY HAIR. Jee whiz mom. Do you know how much time and effort it takes to make it stand up like that?
I paid her back by burning the life out of supper. Nobody said I should ever cook.
26th Nov 2006, 09:34 PM
Nice update! I love Shea, especially when he's thinking about taking Twinkle to the prom. xD
26th Nov 2006, 10:40 PM
Iím back to my natural color again! Iím pretty sure you noticed that in class, but still, I figured Iíd write it down. Who knows when Iíll look back at this and laugh at my choices in hair?
As you know, itís coming close to prom time. Mom got a few racks of dresses sent to the house for me to look through to try and find a dress. I know, Iím not the girliest girl ever, but every girl gets a little excited finding a prom dress. Even if they arenít sure they are going.
You see, the thing is, I want Shae to ask me more than anything. But will he? Probably not. Because heís Shae. He acts like he could speak up about anything any moment, but the second it really matters, he just falls through. Maybe heíll finally grow up. I doubt it though.
So Iíve narrowed it down to two dresses. Itís either this blue one:
Or this green one:
I canít decide whichÖhopefully Iíll decide before the actual dance!
I donít have much else to talk about, but, today, I did make supper. Whoís the best cook ever? I think it might be Jill. :)
26th Nov 2006, 10:55 PM
Wow, great story. I like how it's written. Very lively and teeny.. :D
27th Nov 2006, 06:11 AM
This is such a good story, really teenage...ey...
and great pictures
27th Nov 2006, 06:27 AM
This story is very funny; I hope to read more soon :)
27th Nov 2006, 02:14 PM
They're so cute, I want to steal them! :D I love this story.
27th Nov 2006, 04:43 PM
fun story!...update soon:D
27th Nov 2006, 05:47 PM
Great story...i like the green one :D
27th Nov 2006, 06:44 PM
They're so cute! Kind of weird English papers, but it's always important to amuse your teacher, I guess. I also like the green dress better.
27th Nov 2006, 09:08 PM
The whole idea is that it's kind of like a journal that they have to pass in for English class. I dunno if it makes much sense, but I thought it was a good way to get real emotions out of them. :lol:
And thanks for all of the compliments everyone, glad you're enjoying. :)
29th Nov 2006, 02:41 PM
This is awesome! Moremoremore plzkthx :P
3rd Dec 2006, 01:23 AM
Alright, this was origionally supposed to be way longer, but I'm going to be very very busy the next few weeks, so I'm shortening it quite a bit. There's only 2 more chapters, this one included. Sorry for keeping it so short. ><
I'm so happy you are letting us write our journals together this week, Mrs Barrows. Of course I decided to write with Shae. To keep you from being confused, Shae suggested we use different colors. So what Shae says is in bold, and what I say is normal. Got it?
So prom was amazing. I finally got off my *** and asked Jilly over here to the prom. I'm so happy I did too. Here's our poloroid from the dance.
He cleans up pretty well, doesn't he?
After was really fun too...we went to a pretty sick party.
...What? It was a pretty intense episode of Degrassi on. Look at those facial expressions!
The night went off without a hitch. There was only one really awkward moment as well. That's a record.
It's so sad that this is the last time we're writing in these journals. We've spit out our thoughts in them for a few weeks now.
I'm just glad we don't have much more work...graduation is in a week!
3rd Dec 2006, 02:23 AM
I decided I'm going to do one more chapter, so this is not the last one. I love update chapters. They're cute. :)
Dear Mrs. Barrows,
Iím writing this to you because I am apparently extremely whipped. Iím hoping you remember me, this is Shae Caldwell. The memories are just flooding back now, arenít they? Well, I was actually thinking about those journals we wrote in the last few weeks of highschool. I found it when I was moving back home from college. Thatís right, I graduated that too. You would never guess what I majored in, either. Art. I want to be a chef. Shocking, right? Well, all of those times I burnt the life out of macaroni and cheese taught me something Ė make something else up. Apparently, Iím very good at that. So, anyway, here are some pictures.
Thatís me now. Iím back to my natural hair color (how awkward did it look to have black hair with blonde roots? Backwards much, Mr. Caldwell?) and Iíve also become visually impaired. Iíd get contacts but, well, Iím awful lazy. You should remember that, Mrs. Barrows.
College was a blast. I know what youíre wondering. A. Why I told you I was whipped at the beginning, and B. Where the hell is Jill. Guess what. Sheís the whipper. ÖNot literally. But you get the point. Me and her stayed together all throughout college. Shocked that I can stay with one woman? ÖMe too, kinda. Except for the fact that I love Jill more than anything in life. Is this an AWW moment? Because if it isnít, I have one. I proposed to Jill our last week of college. I did it all cute, too. I got her favorite song on CD, and then played it. So she came into the main room of the dorm, and everyone was standing around and I proposed to her in front of the stereo.
Yeah, I thought it was pretty cute. I may be a complete *** sometimes, but I can be extremely adorable when the time comes. Oh, and if youíre wondering, she said yes.
So I guess the whole point of this was to say thank you. Sure, making us do a project the last few weeks of highschool was a bit mean and ridiculous, but it made us think. And actually learn how to write. That too.
- Shae Caldwell
3rd Dec 2006, 12:11 PM
That last shot is SO AWESOME. BUH.
And that's so sweet. :3
3rd Dec 2006, 12:30 PM
That was so cute! I love it! Eeeee, I'm all happy now. :D
3rd Dec 2006, 07:22 PM
awww that was a cool short story thing, I wish it was longer though. Great job! :gidea: And I want your graphics card T_T
3rd Dec 2006, 07:24 PM
There's one more chapter left, and I'll just say it now, it's really, really cute.
3rd Dec 2006, 09:21 PM
Dear Mrs. Barrows,
It's your favorite student ever again, Shae! I figured I'd send you an update since graduation.
Well, me and Jill moved into a really nice house on the total opposite end of town from our parents houses. Yes that was on purpose. Jill had so much fun redecorating that thing...she hated how it looked before. We both got some great jobs...Jill's doing commercials now, you might've seen her on a bunch. I'm working in a restaurant, and totally not burning stuff, it's excellent.
So you might be wondering how come you didn't get any wedding announcements and such? CAUSE YOU AREN'T INVITED. Just kidding. We haven't gotten married! We were going to this winter, but, well, something got in the way.
I knocked Jill up! Please don't give me a high five like my dad. Extremely awkward. Especially since Jill was two feet behind me. Honestly, I could not be more excited. We're going to get married when the baby is a bit older. I think I'll be an excellent (and probably one of the sexiest) dad. And who knows, maybe him or her will be in your english class in highschool as well!
That just forced you into an early retirement, didn't it? :)
- Shae Caldwell
3rd Dec 2006, 09:57 PM
best story award ^^.
I loved it.
I wish it was longer though..
But great job. (:
3rd Dec 2006, 09:59 PM
Yeah, I wanted it to be longer as well, but I'm afraid I won't have time...'eh. Maybe it will come back with the new baby writing, who knows? ;)
3rd Dec 2006, 10:00 PM
omg. that would be sweet.
4th Dec 2006, 09:05 PM
that a cool but very short story, i like it
5th Dec 2006, 03:23 AM
XD *is loling* i loved shaes hes so cocky, very well done!
5th Dec 2006, 03:31 AM
Shae's my favorite sim ever, I love him too much. *squeeze*
I'm honestly really thinking of bringing the story back...maybe with a slightly different format, with Shae writing to his grandfather instead...what do you think?
5th Dec 2006, 10:25 AM
Awww, I love it! Shae is wonderful. I just love that he's still writing to his English teacher. :D Oooh, I'd love to see more story - that sounds good!
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