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19th Mar 2012 at 10:05 PM
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I ADORE it so far, but there is just one teensy-weesy little thing that would make this perfect, if you showed the charachters inside the elevator while it was crashing.
Like for example, the ride would start normally...then the elevator shakes a little bit....the guys panic a bit...then all comes back to normal....then a DEAFINING EXPLOSION ERUPTS from the top floor! Fire BURSTS out of the side of the building, everybody screams and the elevator and it's screaming passengers begin to plunge....Sparks fly as the lightbulbs in the elevator burst and short-circuiting wires start electrocuting everyone! Then finally....BOOM! The elevator crashes into the bottom and the vision ends.
Just throwing a little tidbit out there...