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#101
7th Jul 2012 at 7:55 AM
Thanks for the advice but I didn't get to check in again until after the flight, lol. Oh well, after re-writing/re-planning my story line 4 or 5 times (I kept finding massive plot holes! lol) I think I finally have what I'm gonna submit as my first chapter...not 100% sure where I'll go from there but fingers crossed the rounds will inspire me like last time
Anyway, just wanted to say I'll be working on pics for the remainder of the time left but unless I have any computer disasters (touch wood) in the immediate future I'll definitely be joining so with Waterjay's entry I think that means we'll just need one more to make it official, Yay! :D
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
Anyway, just wanted to say I'll be working on pics for the remainder of the time left but unless I have any computer disasters (touch wood) in the immediate future I'll definitely be joining so with Waterjay's entry I think that means we'll just need one more to make it official, Yay! :D
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
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#102
7th Jul 2012 at 8:34 AM
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Glad to hear that you're entering missroxor! I'm over halfway through with my entry, so with both of us, we'll have at least ten contestants! *throws confetti*
P.S. I *love* your avatar. I laughed so hard when I saw that.
P.S. I *love* your avatar. I laughed so hard when I saw that.
#103
7th Jul 2012 at 2:01 PM
I just found out that there is a strong possibility that my husband will be losing his job very soon. I've got a jump drive, which has decided it wants to work with the computer that died, not the computer that has Sims 3 on it. (This computer won't recognize it at all.) If I can get it to work I can put my entries onto it and then upload them from the library computer.
So, does anybody know why a computer wouldn't recognize a jump drive?
I am Ghost. My husband is sidneydoj. I post, he downloads, and I wanted to keep my post count.
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So, does anybody know why a computer wouldn't recognize a jump drive?
I am Ghost. My husband is sidneydoj. I post, he downloads, and I wanted to keep my post count.
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#104
7th Jul 2012 at 5:03 PM
Does it not recognize from multiple ports, ghost?
(PS Sending love and prayers to both you and Sidney)
(PS Sending love and prayers to both you and Sidney)
#105
7th Jul 2012 at 7:18 PM
Yay, Buckley! *throws confetti* my avatar is probably out of date, not had the chance to catch up yet but last I read I think Yalena was all gooey eyed for Lyric *glowers at heaven*
Ghost, sorry to hear about your hubby, best of luck to him. Sorry, I don't even know what a jump drive is so can't help D: fingers crossed both situations work themselves out!
Heaven, I can't find it in the rules but was just wondering if we're allowed to use downloaded lots? I take forever building sets but can think of a couple of lots by my fav builder that would suit my theme and would greatly decrease the amount of time I have to faff before taking pics I'm assuming if we're allowed to use custom worlds then custom builds would be fine but thought I'd check to be sure.
I just remembered those builds have cc so I'd get penalized if I used them anyway-duh! Lol. Damn, now I'm thinking, "screw the penalty!!" :p
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
Ghost, sorry to hear about your hubby, best of luck to him. Sorry, I don't even know what a jump drive is so can't help D: fingers crossed both situations work themselves out!
I just remembered those builds have cc so I'd get penalized if I used them anyway-duh! Lol. Damn, now I'm thinking, "screw the penalty!!" :p
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
#106
7th Jul 2012 at 7:29 PM
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Quote: Originally posted by missroxor
Yay, Buckley! *throws confetti* my avatar is probably out of date, not had the chance to catch up yet but last I read I think Yalena was all gooey eyed for Lyric *glowers at heaven* |
*Fist pump*
Didn't I tell you from Day one that Lyric would win? : P
(Sorry for being off topic but that gloat was SO necessary.)
On topic: Can't wait for round 2! Sooo excited.
#107
7th Jul 2012 at 7:44 PM
Last edited by heaven : 8th Jul 2012 at 2:44 AM.
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Quote: Originally posted by missroxor
Yay, Buckley! *throws confetti* my avatar is probably out of date, not had the chance to catch up yet but last I read I think Yalena was all gooey eyed for Lyric *glowers at heaven* Ghost, sorry to hear about your hubby, best of luck to him. Sorry, I don't even know what a jump drive is so can't help D: fingers crossed both situations work themselves out! I just remembered those builds have cc so I'd get penalized if I used them anyway-duh! Lol. Damn, now I'm thinking, "screw the penalty!!" :p |
Yes, you can use lots from other creators. Credit is always nice, especially if the lot is a prominent part. And, if you look, CC is only 1 point this contest, instead of the 5 points it was last time. So if it's necessary, you could easily make it up on the bonus.
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"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
#109
8th Jul 2012 at 3:48 AM
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Chapter One
Sunset Valley looked like nothing was wrong. The town centre nestled against the lush green of hills and trees. The golden sun warmed rather than seared, and no smoke hung in the valley air. Gardens were in full flower, and brick and white plaster of heritage-listed buildings remained unstained. If people appeared grim as they went about their business, it was an unnoticeable undercurrent to a beautiful day.
Zoe Anderson wasn’t sure whether she hated these days or loved them.
She paused, eyes as distant as her thoughts. The day had been busy, but as the sun sunk into the horizon, custom slowed and she had too much time to think. She wandered back to the kitchen, where Greg, cook and owner of the Kitty Kat Kafé, swiped a cloth over the counter.
“Coffee’s up,” he growled, even though she stood in front of him.
Behind her, Liz Handel chuckled. She wasn’t even pretending to work. Her normally cheerful face was downcast, her attention fixed on the café’s television for the 7 o’clock report.
“...Fires continue to sweep across the state as summer temperatures rocket...”
A hint of sport, one assault. Everything else focused on the fires, and the woman’s immaculate makeup and pleasant countenance contradicted the horror of the stories. Zoe’s face softened with sympathy; the solemn tone of the newsreader was sincere, even if actually looking unhappy was against network regulations.
Coming in to work without driving through swirling ash that carried the taste of death was amazing. Knowing it was a deceptive lull, and at any moment the raging fires would flare again and coat her beautiful town in smoke and cinders... then Zoe hated the good days.
Knowing the greenery was a mixture of hardy natives and false life, that beneath was tinderbox and dynamite ready to spring forth into an inferno... then she hated them more.
Every time the CFA*, along with the town’s small fire brigade, thought they’d managed to get a lid on containment, another fire would break out from its silent smoulder and they’d have to start over.
As the newsreader rattled off her lines, Zoe’s eyes drifted over the few patrons in the café. It was fitting, in a way. Jill, half asleep at her table, was the Chief’s daughter. Her mother and brother were volunteers. She would be too... just as soon as they let her. Matt Dennis was CFA and Zoe’s best friend. He waved her over with a lazy smile.
“Not working?” She slid a coffee in front of him.
“Been on call all day.” Matt shrugged, and his mouth twitched in irritation. “Don’t.”
Zoe frowned. “Don’t?”
“Apologise. “
“I wasn’t going to.” Zoe tilted her chin and tried to look stern as she slid into a seat, ignoring Greg’s grunt from across the café. “I was going to say you should be home sleeping.”
“Not here visiting you. Apology was implied.”
“Well, you ‘don’t’ either.”
”Read your mind?” Matt’s irritation dissolved into another grin.
“Yes!”
He laughed and obligingly changed the subject. “I hate this place.”
“I think it’s cute.” Zoe smiled.
”You would. It’s garish.“
“Well, there’s a reason you think that.” She pointed at his shirt. “And you don’t have to come.”
“Who’d make sure you knock off on time then?” Matt’s gaze flicked away. He took a swig of the coffee as if it wasn’t scalding.
“That was only once. You know they really needed me here,” Zoe murmured, a faint blush tinging her cheeks.
Matt snorted.
“Your ex was in.” This time Zoe changed the subject; she didn’t repent when Matt gave her his best puppy-pleading look. “You need to talk to her.”
“Okay. Which ex?”
“Matt! Kirsten, of course.”
“She’d be the latest, right?” Matt continued to avoid Zoe’s eyes.
She heaved a sigh. “I hope so. You can’t have broken another girl’s heart already, surely.”
“Do one night stands count?”
Zoe opened her mouth and closed it, then closed her eyes – though that was as much to block out Matt’s smug smile. She laughed. “You’re incorrigible.”
“I don’t even know what that means. And you should be angry at me. You know, women united and all. Not laughing.”
“Talk to Kirsten. Then maybe she’ll stop talking to me. You won’t have to worry I’m being taken advantage of.”
“You need to be less nice to women with me. You know they’re not going to last.”
“What am I meant to do? Ignore them?”
“Might be worth trying,” Matt muttered.
Zoe pushed to her feet, scooped up the empty cup, and turned back towards the kitchen with a low laugh. “You’re rude enough for both of us. I don’t know how they keep falling for you.”
“My amazing looks and charm. And everyone knows the good guys love dogs.”
“Hitler loved his dog.”
“Shush.”
Zoe’s smile stayed as she ambled back to where Greg drew elaborate designs on coffee and Liz hurriedly pretended to wipe down a table. “He single again?” Liz asked casually.
“You don’t want to go there, Lizzy.” Zoe wrinkled her nose and grabbed one of Greg’s coffees.
“I do,” Liz muttered. Wiping her hands and wandering back to the counter, she ogled Matt. “I definitely do, sweetie.”
Zoe ignored her with practised ease – Liz had had her sights on Matt for years. Another news report flashed onto the television. Zoe froze as the newsreader’s sombre words penetrated.
“...And as another blaze flares up, believed to have been burning in the undergrowth since late last night, Fire Chief Brandon Maybe has issued a statement confirming rumours that the long, hot summer is not only to blame for the fires – many are a result of arson. Police are currently following up leads...”
Anger flared in Zoe.
Jill jumped to her feet with a cry, then drooped as if struck.
“Well, I never.” Liz planted her hands on her hips.
Matt rose more slowly, his body impossibly still. He was angry, but not surprised.
Zoe didn’t see any of them. Her vision swam in red as the words rebounded in her head like a bullet shot. Deliberate... of all the fucked up... Fire seemed to flicker in her normally gentle blue eyes.
She frowned. Awareness penetrated: her hands were toasty warm. She looked down. Flames spilled from the coffee cup she gripped. They danced in deceptive beauty. Her breath caught, and a rush of terror swept aside her anger. She slammed a hand down atop the cup and doused the flames. She stood, shivering. She didn’t dare look up. The newsreader droned on in the background.
“I’m going to text Dad. I bet he knows about it.” Jill whipped out her phone.
“Probably. But I doubt he’ll tell you,” Matt almost growled.
Jill sniffed, her voice choked up. “Yes, he will.”
Zoe pushed away her terror. Liz still watched the television, Greg hadn’t even turned at the announcement, and Jill blinked into her phone, obviously trying not to cry. Matt met Zoe’s gaze, sombre, but that was all. If he’d seen, he wouldn’t just be sombre.
Liz dropped into a seat as Jill punched viciously at her phone. “Of course, we already knew. It’s not nice to have it confirmed though.”
“I didn’t know,” Zoe said quietly.
Liz shot her a pitying look. “Bless your soul, you've got your head in the clouds. Zoe, sweetie, of course someone’s been lighting them. You’re too ready to believe the best of folk.”
Zoe dropped her head. “But... why? People have died.”
Greg banged a plate down. “Maybe they think it’s for the best. My people used to let the fires burn for the land. You folk are scared of them. Or maybe they just like the rush.”
“Greg!” Liz turned on him. “There’s a difference between controlled burning and this... devastation. You’re a cruel man with no heart.”
Zoe stepped in between them. “Please, don’t. Greg wasn’t saying that to be mean, Liz.”
Liz glared. “But it was. You wouldn’t understand, Zoe. You live in town. You’ve never had to deal with the fires up close and personal.”
Zoe swallowed heavily. Memory rose to swamp her, shoving through the gap in her defences the anger – and the fire – had made. The crackle of flames, heat that should burn, choking smoke crawling down her throat and clawing at her eyes, screams...
“Going on break,” she pushed the words out and bolted.
“Break? But you’re knocking off in—”
The back door closed on Greg’s words. Zoe slumped down onto a crate. Even now, it was still hot out. She ignored the rough splinters poking through her dress and pushed her face into her hands.
She sat, unmoving. Her eyes burnt with memory, but she had long run out of tears.
Eventually, Matt appeared to help her silently away. He didn’t say anything, and Zoe was glad. He didn’t know. They’d been best friends for 10 years, but he didn’t know. If he did, he’d hate her for the freak she was.
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*Country Fire Authority
Current Event: Mysterious Past
Word/Picture Count: 1500 (including footnote), 15 pictures
Bonus: Yes
CC: LadyFrontbum Skin, Aikea Eyes, OMSPs, Poses
#110
8th Jul 2012 at 3:59 AM
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Tamlyn, by footnote, do you mean the bit at the end where you note word count and such? if so, you don't need to count those. It's only the "actual" story that counts for your words. If that's not what you mean, ignore me.
Also, guys I am so excited to have 9 contestants and another day to go with quite a few more entrants, maybe. Also, I am loving the ideas of spoilers. They are not required, but they do make loading the page so much faster! So, Melibee1323, thanks for thinking of it!
Also, guys I am so excited to have 9 contestants and another day to go with quite a few more entrants, maybe. Also, I am loving the ideas of spoilers. They are not required, but they do make loading the page so much faster! So, Melibee1323, thanks for thinking of it!
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"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
#111
8th Jul 2012 at 9:16 AM
5 pics down, 10 to go D:
I might be the last person on the planet to realise this but there's a movie maker cheat you can use for TS3 that is SO useful for taking pics! I just stumbled on it by accident tonight. Copied this from a cheats site just in case somebody else finds it useful:
Think it does a lot (but not all) of the same stuff that the animation player does but with this you choose from lists rather than hunting for and typing out codes
PS I didn't need to do the testingcheatsenabled bit.
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
I might be the last person on the planet to realise this but there's a movie maker cheat you can use for TS3 that is SO useful for taking pics! I just stumbled on it by accident tonight. Copied this from a cheats site just in case somebody else finds it useful:
A new cheat is added to The Sims 3 with this expansion, allowing easy machinima (movie creation) for people:
As with previous versions, press CTRL+SHIFT+C to bring up the command prompt. Activate '˜debug mode', using testingcheatsenabled true. Then, type moviemakercheats enabled true.
When shift+left clicking Sims, you can now do the following:
Animation: Pick an animation to play
Disable All Lookouts: Toggles Look Ats for all Sims I.e. Where they are focusing
Edit in CAS: Lets you edit the Sim in Create-A-Sim mode.
Sim Shutdown: Stops the Sim doing anything except things you have instructed.
Set Looping On/One-Off: Allows you to loop the animation.
If you SHIFT+Right click on a NPC Sim to select them, you can now use the options above as well as changing the active household to their one!
As with previous versions, press CTRL+SHIFT+C to bring up the command prompt. Activate '˜debug mode', using testingcheatsenabled true. Then, type moviemakercheats enabled true.
When shift+left clicking Sims, you can now do the following:
Animation: Pick an animation to play
Disable All Lookouts: Toggles Look Ats for all Sims I.e. Where they are focusing
Edit in CAS: Lets you edit the Sim in Create-A-Sim mode.
Sim Shutdown: Stops the Sim doing anything except things you have instructed.
Set Looping On/One-Off: Allows you to loop the animation.
If you SHIFT+Right click on a NPC Sim to select them, you can now use the options above as well as changing the active household to their one!
Think it does a lot (but not all) of the same stuff that the animation player does but with this you choose from lists rather than hunting for and typing out codes
PS I didn't need to do the testingcheatsenabled bit.
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
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#112
8th Jul 2012 at 11:30 AM
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Forgive and Forget
Chapter 1:Sarah Thomas plopped herself onto the couch next to her husband Lee. She nestled into him as he turned on the television, ready for a relaxing date night. They both finally had a moment away from work, from their baby,
and they were going to spend it together. She sighed contentedly. They had just finished a very satisfying dinner (takeout, no cooking for her!) and were arguing playfully about what movie to watch (Thor--Chris Simsworth was hot! No, Catwoman--Halle Plumbob in skintight leather? Come on!) when the doorbell chimed.
Sarah groaned. Who could it possibly be? She didn't move to get up, and neither did Lee.
"Aren't you going to get that?" He said.
Sarah batted her eyelashes at him and replied sweetly, "Would you do the honors, Honey? Opening that heavy door seems like it would better suit such a manly--" Lee cut her off with a kiss and a chuckle, but obliged.
She heard the familiar click of the lock as he pulled open the door.
When he didn't say anything after a moment, Sarah called, "Who is it?"
"Come and see for yourself." Lee replied, his tone incredulous.
Sighing, she pushed herself up and made her way toward her husband, freezing at the face that greeted her.
"Elizabeth." Sarah's voice sounded only mildly irritated, but a mix of fury and betrayal danced through her eyes.
Lee was smart enough to make himself scarce when he saw her expression.
"Sarah." Elizabeth affirmed, relief settling on her face.
Sarah was silent.
Elizabeth winced. "Still unforgiving, I see."
Sarah closed the door, stepping outside. "No. I forgave you for leaving us a long time ago." Sarah said, a rush of emotions coloring her tone. "I forgave you for choosing immortality over me. I just haven't forgotten. I mean, you were supposed to be my big sister, Beth. You were supposed to protect me." Sarah's words were more accusing then she'd meant them to be, her old scars ripped open with but a few words from a long forgotten face. Tears pricked at her eyes, but she buried them somewhere deep and dark and dangerous.
Elizabeth was quiet for a moment. "Is it too late for us now?" She asked, searching Sarah's face.
Sarah softened. Of course not, she thought, of course I have room in my heart for my big sister. But Elizabeth had broken her heart the last time, walked out on their already-in-shambles mother and a drowning Sarah, confused and struggling to keep her head above the surface.
"It was a different time, then. I was a different person." Elizabeth pleaded, interrupting Sarah's reverie. "I shouldn't have have left. I was being selfish. You must understand, Sarah. I was raising you--"
"Exactly!" Sarah snapped. "You raised me. Not Mom. And then you left. She couldn't take care of me--I had to take care of her. I was too young, Beth. I wasn't ready."
"And I was?" Elizabeth whispered. Sarah sobered at that, the gravity of Elizabeth's situation finally weighing on her. She had spent too long being angry at her sister, who had faced impossible circumstances and done the best she could with them.
"When I found vampirism, I found independence." Elizabeth was saying. "John Ross discovered me sleeping on some park bench and offered to buy me clothes--clothes! I loved the material things then. He gave me the world on a silver platter, and all I had to do was join him." She paused. "I just-I wanted to do something for myself, for once."
"So?" Sarah was exasperated. "You could have visited. You could have at least called!" You could have taken me with you, Sarah thought.
Elizabeth cringed. "You are right. But I did not, and for that I am so, so sorry."
"Me too." Regret clouded both sisters' delicate features. Sarah stared at the face that was so much like her own; only Elizabeth's eyes were a little brighter and her skin a little paler.
"After John Ross turned you, did you ever..." Sarah trailed off.
"Yes?" Elizabeth prompted, relieved to hear a question lacking accusation.
"Did you ever think about me?" Sarah looked so vunerable when she asked that painful question it tore into Elizabeth's heart.
"Every day. I missed you every day." Elizabeth said honestly. "At first, I would see clothing items that I thought you would like--I mailed them to you, did you ever get them?"
Sarah was surprised. "No. I never got anything."
Elizabeth sighed sadly. "That may have been John Ross' doing. Regardless, yes. You were always on my mind. But by the time I realized just how much I must have been hurting you I was too much of a coward to return. I could not face you."
"I understand, Beth." Sarah said--possibly the truest thing she had ever uttered (aside from the 'I do' she had promised to Lee, and the 'I love you' she had whispered to Dylan when she first held him in her arms after he was born.) "I...forgive you."
Sarah had said it earlier, but now the words were in acceptance and not contempt. Elizabeth could feel the tears brimming her eyelids.
"Thank you, Sarah. I will make it up to you, if it is the last thing I do."
Sarah wasn't sure how her sister would do that, but somehow she believed her. More than that, she wanted to believe her.
After a moment, their conversation took on a different air.
"So, who is your aquaintence?" Elizabeth inquired.
"My husband, Lee." Sarah said, all malice gone, but a hint of caution remaining in her tone.
"You are married?" Sarah was about to answer (an uh, duh, isn't that what I just said?) when a cry rang out from beyond the hallway.
"Lee?" She yelled. "Would you get him?"
Elizabeth waited expectantly.
"Our son Dylan." Sarah explained. Elizabeth's eyes filled with tears again. "You have a son?"
"Yes, Beth. Things do happen while...over time." Sarah paused. "Which reminds me, why now? After all these years?"
Elizabeth nodded slowly, understanding Sarah's meaning.
"Samara convinced me to attempt to mend our relationship."
"Samara?"
"Yes. It seems we've both missed important...births in each other's lives."
"You have a baby?"
Elizabeth laughed. "She is more a woman now."
Sarah looked confused. "She is but a few years younger than you." Elizabeth explained.
"Oh. Oh!" Sarah was quiet, collecting her thoughts. "Is that why you didn't come back?"
Elizabeth ignored the question. "When I look at you, you are everything a mother would have wanted her child to be. You and my daughter are much alike in this respect. But there are so many things I have missed in your life. May I have the honor of knowing you again?" She said instead.
"Make me a promise." Sarah whispered.
"Anything." Elizabeth was hopeful.
"You tell me everything. And you can meet your nephew...as long as I can meet my niece."
Elizabeth smiled at her sister: the woman more than a decade younger who she'd last seen as a young girl--and they looked the same. With their age difference, it was never apparent how uncanny their resemblance was. But now...it was as if she was looking into a mirror.
"I promise."
Sarah smiled back now, gesturing for Elizabeth to join her inside.
Elizabeth pulled Sarah into a quick embrace before stepping in gingerly, afraid their peaceful bridge would crumble if she even breathed too forcefully.
If Sarah could let her in after all these years, then she could damn well make sure Sarah wouldn't regret it. If it had been anyone else but Samara who told her she could mend their broken relationship, she would have said, "Bless your soul, you've got your head in the clouds." But somehow Samara had motivated her to attempt the impossible--and it was the best thing she had ever done. She vowed to thank her daughter, to protect and love her the way she had meant to with Sarah. There were some things Elizabeth could not take back, but there were some things she could make up for.
She took a seat next to her sister on the couch, smiling at the woman whose heart was big enough to give her a second chance.
Word Count: 1376
Pictures: 12
Hero Type: The Atoner
Plot Point: Redemption Quest
Song Lyric: "Bless your soul, you've got your head in the clouds."
Bonus: Sidekick: Samara (Moral Compass)
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#113
8th Jul 2012 at 2:36 PM
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Welcome Sabri5! I see this is also a new experience for you. It warms my little heart to see everyone getting involved.
Yay, everyone! We've hit our number to keep this contest going, but keep those entries rolling in. Remember, we've got a cap of 20, so there are still 10 spots to be filled! We are down to the wire now (/me googles where this phrase comes from). Not to panic anyone, but there are now 17 hours left to polish those entries up and get them submitted. I can't wait to see what everyone comes up with and, on my day off tomorrow, read all the ones that have already been submitted!
Yay, everyone! We've hit our number to keep this contest going, but keep those entries rolling in. Remember, we've got a cap of 20, so there are still 10 spots to be filled! We are down to the wire now (/me googles where this phrase comes from). Not to panic anyone, but there are now 17 hours left to polish those entries up and get them submitted. I can't wait to see what everyone comes up with and, on my day off tomorrow, read all the ones that have already been submitted!
Heaven Sims | Avendale Legacy
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
#114
9th Jul 2012 at 3:00 AM
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Sorry, last minute question. If the quote doesn't have an ellipsis behind it, does that mean we have to put it at the end of the sentence? Even if we leave it intact and untouched, just using it as a dependent clause in a complex sentence? For example:
"I like this contest because [insert quote], and I can't wait to write chapter 2."
Instead of:
"I like this contest because [insert quote]. I can't wait to write chapter 2."
Hope my example makes sense, lol.
Heaven, if you don't see this before time is up, I will play it safe and rewrite my entry so that the quote finishes the sentence, as I think that's what you meant in the rules. I was just re-reading your post before I submit my chapter and realized that I wasn't sure what you meant.
"I like this contest because [insert quote], and I can't wait to write chapter 2."
Instead of:
"I like this contest because [insert quote]. I can't wait to write chapter 2."
Hope my example makes sense, lol.
Heaven, if you don't see this before time is up, I will play it safe and rewrite my entry so that the quote finishes the sentence, as I think that's what you meant in the rules. I was just re-reading your post before I submit my chapter and realized that I wasn't sure what you meant.
#116
9th Jul 2012 at 4:18 AM
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Oh really? Thanks for the response LadyAwesome. I'll do that then, unless heaven tells me otherwise.
#117
9th Jul 2012 at 4:29 AM
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Quote: Originally posted by Buckley
Sorry, last minute question. If the quote doesn't have an ellipsis behind it, does that mean we have to put it at the end of the sentence? Even if we leave it intact and untouched, just using it as a dependent clause in a complex sentence? For example: "I like this contest because [insert quote], and I can't wait to write chapter 2." Instead of: "I like this contest because [insert quote]. I can't wait to write chapter 2." Hope my example makes sense, lol. Heaven, if you don't see this before time is up, I will play it safe and rewrite my entry so that the quote finishes the sentence, as I think that's what you meant in the rules. I was just re-reading your post before I submit my chapter and realized that I wasn't sure what you meant. |
Buckley, I swear when I wrote those rules for the quotes they made sense. I swear it! However, reading back on them now, I am rather befuddled by my reasoning. So yeah, erm, they can be stuck in a sentence, added on to, or be stand alone as long as you don't change the actual quote itself.
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"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
#118
9th Jul 2012 at 5:57 AM
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Chapter One
Round 1: Prologue Like maggots feasting on a lion’s carcass, the cancer slowly consumes him, weakening him more and more with each passing hour. These days, his disease ridden body trembles with even the slightest movement, but he forces himself to sit upright anyway.
“Emmeline,” he whispers, his once robust voice now struggling to pronounce my name. “I have but one request, before the Dark God comes for my soul.”
I nod my head. “Anything, Sir Roldan. I will do it for you.” And I will. For eight long years, he has been my mentor, my guardian, my friend. Since my mother’s death, he has taken me in and taught me everything I know. I will not let him down. Not now, not ever.
“Take that letter,” he says quietly, “and deliver it to Triston’s crowned prince.”
A cold shiver runs down my back. “His royal highness? Would not a man of lesser rank satisfy?” I plead.
“No,” he replies, summoning up a shadow of his former tenacity. “It is of the utmost importance that you give the letter to the prince and only the prince, intact and unopened, before his impending coronation. I cannot stress that enough, Emmeline. Promise me.”
I take his hand in mine, squeezing it gently. “I promise,” I whisper, fighting back tears.
With painful effort, he removes a single silver ring from his finger and places it in the palm of my hand. “Give this to the prince, as a sign of our goodwill.”
“Sir Roldan has died,” I announce, emerging a few hours later.
As warriors in the elite Order of the Lynx, we are trained from childhood never to show emotion. Emotions lead to mistakes, our masters explained, and mistakes lead to death. However, the men, my brothers and fellow fighters, seem disheartened by the news of our leader’s passing.
“We must return to Wallington at once,” Tariq commands, “to bury his body amongst those of the fallen.”
“Yes,” I concede, “but I cannot go. Sir Roldan has given me one last mission. I leave for Triston at once.”
“Triston?” he growls. “What business does Roldan have there?”
“He did not say, and I dared not ask.”
“But you hate Triston,” Gideon chimes in, already heavily intoxicated at this early hour.
“Yes, but for Sir Roldan, I shall wade into the bedroom of our enemy and see through his last wish, regardless of the price,” I declare, sounding much braver than I feel.
The journey to Triston’s capital is relatively short; just a few weeks ride on horseback. Calix, my cat, accompanies me on this trip, despite my insistence that he stay home. Unfortunately, he talks much more than he listens.
Those were foolish words for a foolish mission, he purrs, licking himself clean.
I laugh. “Perhaps, but foolish or not I will see it through.”
Only a fool would risk her life for a dead man, he insists. Besides, what do you owe a prince whose soldiers beat, raped, and murdered your mother and sisters? If it hadn’t have been for Sir Roldan, you probably would have joined them in the Realm of The Lost Souls.
His words cut sharply at my old wounds, reminding me of painful memories I so desperately want to forget. I was merely ten when they were killed, a frightened child, helpless to save her family. The Tristonian army massacred my entire village; men, women, and children all murdered at the tip of their swords. Within a year, my country was being ruled under the iron fist of Triston’s infamously cruel regent, Lord Hadrian.
Every day, I tell myself that I’ll be strong, that I’ll fight for their honor, to make right their deaths, but I often wonder if my resolve is not fading. I have grown comfortable in my life as a Lynx warrior. Too much so, I believe. I hate Triston with such passion that my heart aches just thinking of it, but yet I have done nothing to stop their bloody crusades and ruthless conquests. The shame feels almost unbearable.
Tired, sore, and hungry, I arrive at the castle late one afternoon, only to be turned away by two crude guards looking for any excuse to fight.
“I need to see the prince,” I declare impatiently.
They laugh, a grating sound that wears on my nerves. “Don’t we all, sweet cakes. How about you see me instead, in about 30 minutes when I get off?” the blonde one taunts.
My hand automatically reaches for the hilt of my sword, but Calix meows, warning me to play nice.
“Fine, then I demand to see your commander.”
They skulk at this suggestion, but after a bit of persuasion I manage to gain an audience with the head guard.
“The prince?” he asks. “What business do you have with him?”
“A letter, of urgent importance.” Hesitantly, I show him the envelope, so old it has yellowed with age.
Upon seeing the seal, stamped with some symbol I do not recognize, the guard grows visibly uneasy, fidgeting back and forth.
“Right this way,” he directs impatiently.
After a few hours of waiting, he leads me into a richly decorated office and snaps the door closed behind me. I have never seen the fabled prince before, but I immediately know this man is not him.
“Who are you?” I ask quietly, feeling unusually anxious.
He smiles, revealing two rows of perfectly white teeth, but his eyes remain still and untouched. “Who are you?” he wants to know.
“I have a letter for the prince,” I explain. My normally forceful voice suddenly sounds weak and desperate.
“Let me see,” he commands. It is not a question, but an order.
I feel my temper begin to rise. “It is for the prince and the prince alone. I demand to see him!”
He laughs, a hollow sound that feels as empty as his cold blue eyes. “Making demands of the regent? You are a feisty one.”
The regent? His words sink in slowly, like a thousand angry needles piercing my skin. I start to apologize, but I quickly stop myself. I shall not grovel before a murderer.
He smiles again, amicably motioning to the chair in front of his desk. “You seem tired,” he comments. “Perhaps you’d like to stay the night at the castle? I’m sure there’s room in the servant’s quarters. I can arrange a meeting with the prince tomorrow, once he returns from his hunting trip.”
He seems… nice. Too nice, I think, but I readily accept his offer for lodging. It will be much cheaper than renting a room in town.
That night, Calix awakens me from a sound sleep.
Intruder.
That’s all he says, but after years of training I immediately spring into action.
“Who sent you?” I yell once I’ve got the man pinned to the floor.
He laughs, but with one brutal twist I show him who’s in charge.
“Why are you here?” I demand.
“The letter,” he chokes, but before he can say anymore he collapses to the floor in a lifeless puddle.
“Dead,” I tell Calix. “Cyanide poisoning, I’m sure of it.”
He was sent here to murder you.
I roll my eyes, feeling unreasonably irritated. “I know that Calix,” I snap.
I told you it was a fool’s mission.
I ignore him and begin searching the man’s clothing for clues. I find a piece of paper tucked in his pocket with a crude map of the castle drawn on the back. One of the guard’s towers appears to be circled. “He was going to meet someone here,” I surmise. “Perhaps… Perhaps a bit of digging is needed,” I whisper, an idea forming in the back of my mind.
After swapping clothes with the dead attacker, I find my way to the location on the map.
“You’re late,” the man says, without ever really looking at my face. “Do you have the letter?” he asks.
“She burned it,” I whisper, stretching to make my voice deeper and more masculine. If he notices anything suspicious, he remains quiet about it.
“Burned?!” he sounds horrified. “Lord Hadrian will have my head!” he wails.
“What does he want with the messenger’s letter?” I speak slowly, delicately probing for more information.
“How do I know?!” the man snaps. “All he told me was to get that letter in one piece. Something about the old king’s seal.” And with that, he stalks off, leaving me alone to ponder his final statement.
Calix catches up with me a few minutes later.
Can we go home now? he asks, sounding droll.
“Not yet,” I smirk. “Something about my letter has the regent on edge, and I fully intend to find out what.”
He yowls angrily in my ear, but I gleefully ignore him. Perhaps now I will have a chance to seek the revenge I so desperately long for.
CC Used: Skin, Eyes, Store Content, Poses, OMSP, World
Event: Beware the Nice Guy
Word/Picture Count: 1,476 Words/11 Pictures
Bonus: Yes
Additional Credits: Candle-Town Uptown by candlelight82 and Clouded Leopard (Calix) by Lea.Sikora
#119
9th Jul 2012 at 6:08 AM
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Ala
Life.....
It is one of those things that can be lost so fast one mintue your totally in control of everything around you, living, breathing, seeing. Everything possible is for the taking, what is it you dream of most? Can you taste it? Or is it so far away that your fingers just cant quite make it? Or maybe, you watch, wishing, hoping, stewing on it until one day you explode.
So you run to no where in particular, you have been running so long that your starting to feel the strain. As you start to slow you look around taking in the scenery before you, the sun has gone down and all you see around you is empty streets. Your heart starts to race and your eyes widen, all you hear is the drip coming from a building and it sets off goose pumps, then everything goes black.
What they do not realise is that in the dark of the shadows, behind that trash can and watching from the hight roof tops. There is always something watching.....waiting, for the perfect time to pounce. To feed on the innocent and compete in the fight for power. You may think your the only being out there, don't you human? The things you can discover if you just look hard enough. Those are the things that eat you alive, tear at your flesh and remove all traces like you never exsisted at all.
My life has not always been nice to me I was born different, maybe not on the outside – but on the inside everything is a abomination. Everything seemed normal as a child, I did normal things children did. That was until I hit the ripe age of 13 thats when the hunger began, I don't know how else to describle the feeling. I never got any warning, my whole body would freeze over, feeling like someone else was talking over. Then my body melted into it feeling the hungers extacy, what happens after that is best unsaid. Still to this day I struggle to look at myself in the mirror, to face the demon inside me. I know she will always be in there lurking it takes all my strength just to fight back.
The only thing keeping me on edge was my new found friend dog, who was in fact a wolf. She had been by my side ever since (which was only a week ago). . . .I decided to fight back against my demon. I tell myself that I'll be strong, but the truth is that wolf is my rock and without her, I would be straight back where I started. Sometimes I wonder where she come from, and what exactly she is. Normal animals bark and snarl at me, they have good sences like that. I guess that is why I feel this attatchment to dog she makes me feel safe even if it is a false sence of security.
Being bogged up in side makes me restless, so on this fine day I decided that a walk was in order. It was nice to be alone since the dog was usually around. Listening to the wind pick up and blow my hair around my faces. It had an odd sence of serenity......Then BOOM it hit me, my heart skipped a few beats.
Once I opened my eyes I panicked, my hands were tied behind my back and my vision was blurry. I could not remember a thing, I felt my heart start to race again but knowing how stupid that was, I forced my self to breath slower. Once I had calmed myself I noticed a blonde little girl sitting on the chair reading. I looked around and it was deffinatly my house.
“WHAT THE ….” I struggled to get the hand cuffs off but nothing was working.
The small girl just smiled. “I was wondering how long it was going to take you to wake, how are you feeling?”
I just spat at the crude little monster “WHERE IS DOG!” I screamed at her, and what the hell had she tied me up with, this shit is starting to burn.
Then it hit me, I looked to the small girl as she closed her book, she had the most unusual eyes. She smelt....like dog but that could be the bed, my nose was rather close to the blanket.
“It happened again didn't it.” I whispered and the small girl gave me a sad grin and nodded slowly.
“Do you remember anything Ala?” She asked softly.
My head was pounding and I just looked to her for a moment. What was I doing?
“Do you know what happened to me? I whispered.
She nodded slowly.
“What is your name?” I asked after a long silence.
“Lottie” she said softly.
As I sat up Lottie pulled over her chair to sit closer to me. Really, what was a child doing in my appartment? Some things were not adding up, I looked at her for a while, it seems as she was just waiting for me to ask questions. This was no normal girl.
“How did you find me?” I finally ask her, unsure if I actually wanted to know this answer.
“I have been here the whole time.” She smiled so innocently, it made my stomache queezy.
I looked under the bed as if I would a sign of someone living under there, but there was nothing. The silence was drilling into my skull, I couldn't think. “what do you mean here?” I demanded frowning at her. She just kept a placid face, like there was no worry in the world.
“Well, I have been by your side waiting, ever since you said that prayer.” She looked at me right in the eyes.
I always thought demons were burnt from the inside if they touched or said anything about god, or holy or anything.
“Bloody Hell, what on earth is going on?” I cursed.
Out of no where I heard cracks of bones and a light shimmering, as I looked up at Lottie, she was no longer a little girl.
“Remember me? It is lucky you got me doll, because a little birdy told me your going to have a visitor and your not going to like it.”
Pictures:10
Word Count: 1066
Atoner.
Plot point: Mind over matter
Sidekick: Moral Compass
CC: Everything... I will try list everything I remember
Heavens Buildings/LemonLeaf make up/Sclub accessories/Anubis hair/ Ace creations/ Ala's boots/ plus probably more.....skin by sclub too I think and D3N eye contact.... or I have about 10 different eyes hahaha. Arisku made the wolf..... excuse my shitty graphics
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9th Jul 2012 at 6:44 AM
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So, yeah, the deadline is midnight. Seriously, I am about to conk out. Hazards of going to bed after midnight last night and getting a phone call from the spouse across the world before 6am. Don't get me wrong; I much appreciate it but I am questioning my wisdom on choosing a deadline that is midnight my time. I don't think there is any. So, I am heading to bed. I will update any new entries in the contestant table when I get up in the morning. Because of my tardiness, I will accept entries a bit late. Do try to get them in by the deadline but I won't be a stickler for on the dot timing. I will be checking the time stamps though so don't think 4 hours late is acceptable.
Because I will NOT be staying up until midnight, I will go ahead and post Round 2 information now. I do not think an hour and a half difference will make or break anyone who happens to see it and start working now, nor will it give anyone who has yet to turn in their entry a clear advantage. There isn't enough time for them to change anything anyway!!! Note to self: next timer will NOT be midnight. Judges, be on the lookout for a PM from me sometime within the next 8-9 hours with some judging info and such. Feel free to start working before that though if you would like.
If everyone gets their Round 2 entry in before the deadline, we can move on to Round 3. However, that is only if everyone is able to do this. Otherwise, the timer below sticks. No bonus points will be awarded; just more of a "we're having fun, let's keep going," camaraderie.
Round 2 – Rising Action – TIMER
Round 2 should be where your audience can begin to see what the climax of the story will be. You should be building up to figuring out who your villain is or masterminding the attempt to take him down. This should be the planning and plotting chapter and, because of that, the word count has been increased a little. Between 1,200 and 1,700 words and 10 to 17 pictures. Anything above or below these numbers will result in loss of points.
Excerpt: Choose ONE of the following quotes.
“He's a devil in disguise…”
“I remember you said "Don't leave me here alone".”
“I'm just like you, only prettier.”
Round 2: Bonus Worth 5 points Hero costume time! Introduce an outfit (it doesn’t have to be a permanent choice) that your hero could use as his/her costume.
Please include a brief summary (around 100 words) before your entry. This will NOT be counted towards your word count.
Also, please include information listed below your entry:
Current Plot Point: What did you use this chapter?
Previous Plot Points: Here you will keep a running list of what you have already used.
Word Count:
CC Used: Allowed ____. This can be as simple as a yes/no response
Because I will NOT be staying up until midnight, I will go ahead and post Round 2 information now. I do not think an hour and a half difference will make or break anyone who happens to see it and start working now, nor will it give anyone who has yet to turn in their entry a clear advantage. There isn't enough time for them to change anything anyway!!! Note to self: next timer will NOT be midnight. Judges, be on the lookout for a PM from me sometime within the next 8-9 hours with some judging info and such. Feel free to start working before that though if you would like.
If everyone gets their Round 2 entry in before the deadline, we can move on to Round 3. However, that is only if everyone is able to do this. Otherwise, the timer below sticks. No bonus points will be awarded; just more of a "we're having fun, let's keep going," camaraderie.
Round 2 – Rising Action – TIMER
Round 2 should be where your audience can begin to see what the climax of the story will be. You should be building up to figuring out who your villain is or masterminding the attempt to take him down. This should be the planning and plotting chapter and, because of that, the word count has been increased a little. Between 1,200 and 1,700 words and 10 to 17 pictures. Anything above or below these numbers will result in loss of points.
Excerpt: Choose ONE of the following quotes.
“He's a devil in disguise…”
“I remember you said "Don't leave me here alone".”
“I'm just like you, only prettier.”
Round 2: Bonus Worth 5 points Hero costume time! Introduce an outfit (it doesn’t have to be a permanent choice) that your hero could use as his/her costume.
Please include a brief summary (around 100 words) before your entry. This will NOT be counted towards your word count.
Also, please include information listed below your entry:
Current Plot Point: What did you use this chapter?
Previous Plot Points: Here you will keep a running list of what you have already used.
Word Count:
CC Used: Allowed ____. This can be as simple as a yes/no response
Heaven Sims | Avendale Legacy
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
"On the internet, you can be anything you want. It's strange that so many people choose to be stupid."
#121
9th Jul 2012 at 6:50 AM
By "summary", heaven, do you mean a brief overview of what's going on in the story?
#122
9th Jul 2012 at 7:02 AM
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Quote: Originally posted by ForeverCamp
By "summary", heaven, do you mean a brief overview of what's going on in the story? |
I think I can answer that for you.
Last cycle the pre-chapter summary was a short blurb about what had happened previously in the story (Round 2 summary = the events of round 1, round 3 summary = the events of the previous rounds)
#123
9th Jul 2012 at 7:52 AM
Blood Red
Blood Red: Beware the Nice GuyGrowing up I was always very aware that I wasn’t the same as the other girls. As the governor’s only daughter I was dragged around many a black tie function in poufy dresses and made to mingle with the city’s elite on a daily basis. Primped and preened young ladies clamoured to make friends with the Governor’s daughter; I had more offers to go out shopping or attend high-class luncheons than I knew what to do with. That is until word got around that I was... different. I was the sort of girl that was more comfortable in a pair of scuffed, old boots than in a pair of Manolo’s and the only interest Daddy’s credit card held for me was for jimmying open the door to his office where he kept his gun safe.
If he was disappointed to have such an awful excuse for a lady as a daughter he hid it well. That was until it came to my career choice. He went as far as lining up an administrative job for me at a prestigious law office and begged me to give it a chance. It was literally the dullest week of my life! I tell him it’s partially his fault. If he hadn’t instilled such a sense of patriotic pride and loyalty I probably wouldn’t even have consider a life in the military!
Being a serving member of the National Guard is the ultimate honour, even for a lowly Inner circle guard (ICG) like me. Of course I would love to work the outer circle where all the action’s at, God knows I’m tough enough... but Daddy didn’t want his “little girl” on the front line. He only reluctantly obliged to let me join the ICG when I threatened to leak it to the press that the governor thought ‘The Guard’ was good enough for the thousands of young citizens he recruits every year but not for his precious daughter. Ever since he’s played the proud, patriotic father role without complaint.
We circle guards make up a good chunk of the city’s defences but we specialise in border patrol and policing our most prominent enemies; the Reds. Reds tend to live in tribes or packs -whatever they wanna call themselves- in abandoned areas of the outer limits. They use the ancient and long since sealed sewers to move around usually since their presence above ground, within the city limits is prohibited and will result in them being cautioned and/or imprisoned (unless they have proper slave certification and can be vouched for by their owner, of course – I’m referring to non-domesticated reds only). Reds are awful creatures, prone to violence and fits of insanity. Often outer circle guards (OCGs) are required to use force in order to restrain some of the wilder reds which often escalates to the termination of that red if they insist on being difficult. That’s why only the toughest guards work the outer circle.
Rarely does one make it through to the inner circle but we remain vigilant none-the-less. We are entitled to challenge anyone that looks sub-human or has Red characteristics and perform a field genome test looking for the telltale MC1R genome indicating a positively ID’d Red. We carry a nifty little Genome Interrogator (GI) for that exact purpose since it’s all too easy for Reds to disguise themselves as normal humans. Just point and aim. It’s a proximity detector so as long as the suspect’s within 4-5ft you’ll get a reading within 10 seconds. My GI has sadly never left its smooth, shiny holster. In fact I’ve not even met a real red yet, only the captive and sedated ones in basic training not so long ago. I can’t wait for my first catch!
On the way back to the patrol base we’re informed the alert state has just been elevated from the relatively safe green state to amber indicating increased danger. This means more soldiers on the streets and longer patrols for us. We’ll also have to field test all civilians who enter our patrol district, not just the suspect ones. This is great; I might get the chance to play with my GI now!
After my patrol I decide to take a trip to Dad’s office in city hall, see if he is willing to shed any light on the alert states situation since they were tight lipped about the reasons on camp. OK, so it’s probably not public knowledge but it’s my ass out there and I know he’ll want to do what he can to protect it. He reveals there’s been intelligence to suggest the Reds have more numbers than we’d previously estimated. Thermal imagery shows large concentrations of probable Reds in camps along the outer limits.
“We’re trying to decipher their intentions. All I can say is, if the alert state goes up again expect things to move quickly.”
“It might go up again?” I’m shocked; I’ve never seen it at red. That means we’d impose a cordon around the city and our orders would be to shoot on sight any humanoids.
“Don’t worry, Sweetie. They won’t even break the outer circle: we’ll be sending pre-emptive strike teams across the border before they get the chance”.
“Into their territory?” my mouth gapes.
“They don’t have territory, Jada”, his voice is stern, “they’re nothing but vermin on our property and you know what happens to vermin”
What?! He can’t mean... mass extermination? I hate reds as much as the next guy but... they’re still technically human beings!
Just then Dad’s receptionist, Violet interrupts with a visitor for Dad stood behind her. Still a little dazed by what I’ve just heard I make my excuses and head back to my quarters.
Just as I’m about to jump into my bunk I see the corner of an envelope sticking out from under my pillow. Inside is a print-out of what looks like the paternal lineage of my family. There’s me, Dad, my late Granddad and two more I don’t recognise but are presumably my ancestors. The last one in the line is a straight up Red. No mistaking that day-glow ginger mop. Scribbled in red ink on the back of the page are two words:
GENOME INTERROGATOR
No doubt one of my squad mate’s idea of a joke, ha-ha very funny. I scrunch the paper and toss it to the bin before flopping on the bed. My sleep is fitful and unfulfilling.
As anticipated the next day is a long one. We’d been upgraded to Red Alert before my shift started and rumours were rife about Dad’s advanced teams that were already nicknamed the “Red Raiders”. My blood ran cold at the memory of my father’s crude analogy. Reds are hated and reviled for countless reasons but is extermination really the answer? Are they really that close to breaching the city limits...I mean, by all accounts they’re nothing but a bunch of un-educated savages!
I’m patrolling district 7 of the inner circle; my patrol partner, Ray’s, about 100ft away when we see the first blasts. Heavy fire. It’s closer than I expect. My heart sinks; there’s no going back now, this is happening. For so long I wanted the glory and honour of battling those animals but in the here and now with flames scorching the horizon I suddenly feel the full weight of my soul as if there was a shift in the gravitational force rooting me where I stand. Just watching.
Movement out of the corner of my eye pulls me out of my dazed stupor. I’m in the open in the middle of a warzone with enemies potentially all around. I need cover! My eyes dart around looking for my partner but I’ve lost visual. Shit. I sprint toward the abandoned building where I saw the movement coming from hoping I’m running towards a friendly face rather than a freckled one.
Scoping the room inside, my eyes dart wildly searching for movement, for Ray.
“It’s you...” the gravelly voice comes from the shadows in the far corner. I freeze, my heart pounding against my chest; that’s not Ray. “Jada, I’m not the enemy. Did you use your GI? It will show you see the truth?”
What the... It knows my name, who I am – How!? Use my GI - when?...oh, “The envelope... you sent it? Who the hell are you?”
It steps forward enough for me to see a shock of red hair poke out from under his hat. I gasp and once again I’m rooted, unmoving. He moves toward me and I hear Ray cry out from the doorway, “Jada, down!” Before I know what’s happened I’m leaping in front of the red...
I wake to screaming hot pokers piercing my shoulder, my limbs are lead. A burst of flames dances in front of me, “Jada”... The fire calls me.
Darkness again.
Pictures:14 (Run out of time to make girls for the first pic).
Word Count: 1486 (without title)
Hero Type: Chosen One
Plot point: Beware The Nice Guy
Sidekick: Highly competent (hint: they sent the letter with the family tree)
CC: Lots, will try to draw up a list when I don’t have 10 minutes left till deadline :p
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#124
9th Jul 2012 at 8:06 AM
Last edited by missroxor : 9th Jul 2012 at 8:47 AM.
Phew, really wasn't sure I'd get that done in time! Apparently the world I choose to take the majority of my pics has serious lag issues...wish I'd known before I commited to it
Also, I made a typo but it's too late to make changes so just FYI, when the red is talking to her he's supposed to say, "It will show you the truth", I forgot to delete the "see" and question mark. Also, I meant, "hypercompetent", not highly competent :p
Right, am off to read chapter 2 and probably have a meltdown about how I'm gonna work it into the story, lol
EDIT: I love the bonus round! Can't wait to get started on this. Just been reading some of the stories and I really hope you all are fast with you're second chapter, lol cause every one I've read so far I can't wait to see what happens next, so many cliff hangers!! :D
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
Also, I made a typo but it's too late to make changes so just FYI, when the red is talking to her he's supposed to say, "It will show you the truth", I forgot to delete the "see" and question mark. Also, I meant, "hypercompetent", not highly competent :p
Right, am off to read chapter 2 and probably have a meltdown about how I'm gonna work it into the story, lol
EDIT: I love the bonus round! Can't wait to get started on this. Just been reading some of the stories and I really hope you all are fast with you're second chapter, lol cause every one I've read so far I can't wait to see what happens next, so many cliff hangers!! :D
Guys, rules are good! Rules help control the fun. ~ Monica E. Geller
#125
9th Jul 2012 at 12:57 PM
Following the stories here and I MUST SAY the stories are wonderful.To HEAVEN, its kind of you to host the contest.Though am not participating, reading the tread gives me so much joy.Keep it up all and best of luck to all the contestants.
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