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|1st Mar 2009, 07:04 AM||#26|
I Just Wanted 2 Say Thanxs For All The Good Feedback And I Just Wanted 2 Say I've Read And Seen Lots Of Different Stories On Here And There Amazing! But With My Story I Kinda Wanna Doo Sumthing Really Different With How I Tell It.....i Just Wana Show A Different Side Of Story Telling .... With Twist And Sim Action As I Like To Call It ... I Dunno I Just Wana Open And Unleash My Imagination!
|1st Mar 2009, 07:32 AM||Chapter 5: When Things Get Weird, They Only Get Weirder. #27|
Emily layed there on her bed unable to sleep. So many things filled her mind. She began to wonder who really was Emily Bronson. Was she the average girl from Foothills or was she much more than that. Did she belong to this fantasy world of the underworld? Who was her mother? She couldn’t wait for the sun to come up and go away. So Louis could tell her everything. She finally closed her eyes. Hoping that the answers or something would come into her mind.
Remember…Remember…Remember. She told herself over and over…flashes of herself as a young girl came into her mind. Swarming into her dreams. Then it was as if something broke and shattered on the floor. Emily’s eyed widen. She couldn’t help wonder what or who it was. She quietly stepped out of bed and strode over to the door. She could hear Lorelei saying something but couldn’t quite make it out.
“Emily? Is that you?” Lorelei asked.
“Emily?” she asked again. A cold breeze slipped into the the room. Lorelei could feel the fire begin to tinkle. Lorelei heard laughter. “Who’s there?” she said at once. “Where’s the girl.” A voice came out.
Emily walked out only to find her worst fear right before her. Emily stopped dead in her tracks. “Well hello beautiful…” Drake said.
“RUN EMILY!! RUN!” She left out the door and ran as fast as she could. She didn’t look back...not once. Emily came to a hault where she and Louis where talking. All she had to do was hide until sunset. It would not belong. Then two shadows flew by her almost making her fall down to the floor.
“Leaving soooo soon baby?The fun is just beginning” the woman said.
“LEAVE ME ALONE!” she cried out. She quickly tried to run but the bald woman blocked her off. They began circling her. They’re fangs glimmering through there mouths. Then a noise from the bushes came. All Emily saw was a stream of white fly from the trees and out into the open. Emily stood in shock forgetting that the man known as Drake was behind her. Drake began to back away. It appeared to be some kind of cat like creature. The creature kicked Jade and began clawing her face.
Drake quickly made an attempt to grab Emily, Who was still in shocked. Drake looked up into the clouds and hissed, “Louis!” Drake dissapeared into the shadow of the trees. Louis flew into the scene and grabed the bald woman who was bleeding from the scratches on her face. Louis grabed the woman and began draining her blood from her neck.
Louis threw the woman onto the floor leaving her dead. “Emily..” but before he could finish. His eyes gazed up upon the sky which the sun began rising. “I must leave.” He vanished before Emily could say something. The sun fully shined and Emily stood there. Emily turned only to find Lorelei standing in front of her naked.
“YOU BETTER TELL ME WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON!”
|1st Mar 2009, 05:31 PM||#28|
Join Date: Nov 2006
Wow so Lorelei is like a cat person or something. Thats so cool. Just keeps getting better. Cant wait for more.
|1st Mar 2009, 05:58 PM||#29|
I thought there was sumthing funny about her, cant wait for the next update!!
|3rd Mar 2009, 07:44 PM||Chapter 6: The Damsel In Distress. #30|
“I CAN EXPLAIN EMILY..BUT FIRST WE NEED TO LEAVE.” Emily put her hands on her hips. “NO I HAD ENOUGH…. I WANT ANSWERS!” Then it was as something was coming through the trees fast. A black Escalade came from the dirt trail and into the open fast. The driver, which appeared to be some kind of guard came out holding a weapon at them. The guard fired and hit Lorelei. Emily let out a loud shriek holding her hands in the air. Then from the back car door a blonde woman stepped out. The guard remained aimed at Emily. “Don’t worry…shes not dead. Shes been tranqualized.”
“Come with me Emily…. I can help you.” Emily took a step back. “No way.” Emily bagan taking more and more steps back. The woman laughed. “We can do it the easy way or the hard way. Your choice….” Emily Began looking at the guards who began pulling out large guns. Emily spun around and headed toward the entrance into the woods. “STOP HER!” The only thing she remember was hitting the dirt. She blacked out completley.
It must have been hours. Emily was in and out of sleep. At moments she could feel the car move or hit bumps. She couldn’t even have enough energy to fully open her eyes. She remember seeing lots of trees through the window. Then she awoke to that womans voice. “I’ve brought you a present brother.” The way the woman said it was as If Emily was a piece of meat. She opened her eyes. She awoke only to find herself in a nice room with a man in a mask with long blonde hair slicked down his back. His beautiful light blue eyes shinning through the silver mask.
“Where am I and who are you people?” she demanded. “Hello and welcome…I am Maxmillian Worthington the sixth. I see you’ve met my siter Helena. We’ve been searching for you a very long time.” Emily starred back and remembered what Louis had said about her being some kind of prodigy and her blood being special. “You have the wrong person…am nobody…am just Emily Bronson.”
The man in the mask chuckled. “My dear girl we are not fools…” Emily shook her head. “What exactly do you want?” she waited. “You don’t know do you? Such a shame…..all that power.” Emily shook her head. “They’ll come for me..” she said almost as if she were threating them. The man laughed again. “Let them come….”
“Take her away from my presence.” The guards uplifted Emily. Emily began struggling to free away but it was no use.
“What shall we do with her brother?” Helena asked.
“We need to sacrifice her….her blood is the only way to salvation.”
“brother I truly deeply…..want her eyes.” Helena said.
“You shall get them sister….you shall get them indeed.”
|4th Mar 2009, 02:49 AM||#31|
Join Date: Nov 2006
Well that was unexpected. Great update.
|5th Mar 2009, 04:40 AM||#32|
Poor Emily, will she ever catch a break?
|9th Mar 2009, 07:40 PM||Chapter 7: THE ORACLE. #33|
THE SUN HAD JUST FALLEN OVER THE MOUTAINS. LOUIS QUICKLY ARRIVED ONTO THE SCENE WERE LORELEI WAS. TRISTIAN WAS AT HIS SIDE AS WELL. HE ARRIVED TO FIND HER LYING ON THE GROUND.
LOUIS: LORELEI WHERES THE GIRL?
LORELEI: THEY TOOK HER AWAY BEFORE I COULD DO ANYTHING… I FAILED YOU LOUIS….I FAILED TO PROTECT HER.
LORELEI: NO...NO...NOT...NOT VAMPIRES…A WOMAN...GUARDS...
LOUIS: SHE’S BEEN TRANQULIZED...
TRISTIAN: HOW WOULD YOU KNOW THAT MASTER?
LOUIS TOOK A DART FROM HER NECK AND HELD IT OUT TO HIM. TRISTIAN TOOK IT AND BEGAN OBSERVING IT.
LOUIS: DON’T WORRY YOU HAVENT FAILED US….WE MUST FIND HER.
TRISTIAN: BUT HOW?
LOUIS: THE SAME WAY I FOUND EMILY….THE ORACLE CAN HELP US.
LOUIS LOOKED DOWN AT LORELEI WHO HE WAS HOLDING IN HIS ARMS.
LOUIS: WE MUST GET HER OUT OF HERE. ANYBODY COULD BE RETURNING. THEN WE MUST QUICKLY LEAVE TO FIND THE ORACLE. BURN THE HOUSE. WE MUST NOT LEAVE ANY TRACES.
TRISTIAN NODDED AND VANISHED OFF.THEY ARRIVED DEEP INTO THE WOODS. THE MOON WAS SHIMMERING DOWN THROUGH THE WOODS. THEY CONTIUED DEEPER AND DEEPER UNTIL THEY WERE LOST. THEY FINALLY ARRIVED UPON A COTTAGE AND A SWAMP SURROUNDED THE HOUSE AND THE SIDES OF THE TRAIL THAT LED TO IT. OWLS COULD BE HEARD AND OTHER CREATURES OF THE NIGHT. THEY WALKED IN. CANDLES LIT AND EVERYOTHER STEP WAS A LOUD CREAK FROM THE ROTTEN WOOD.
LOUIS NODDED TOWARDS HER.
LOUIS: I NEED YOUR HELP….ONCE MORE.
ORACLE: TAKE A SEAT.
LOUIS STRODE OVER TO HER AND SAT ACROSS.
LOUIS: I NEED TO FIND THE GIRL….
ORACLE: LOUIS...LOUIS...THE PATH YOU ARE TAKING WILL ONLY DAMN YOU TO END OF DAYS.
LOUIS: I’VE LIVED LONG ENOUGH TO SEE MUCH IN TIME….NOW PLEASE. HELP ME.
ORACLE: YOU ARE SO DESTIN TO SAVE THIS GIRL…ARENT YOU?
THE ORACLE MADE A SMALL LAUGH.
ORACLE: YOU MIGHT BE DEAD…..BUT YOU HAVE THE HEART OF A HUMAN. YOUR DESTINY WILL ONLY LEAD YOU TO THE END OF THE ROAD. BUT IF YOU’RE TRUE DESIRE IS WHAT YOU SAY IT IS. LET YOUR HEART GUIDE YOU TO SALVATION…LOOK INTO THE BOWL…ONLY YOU’RE HEART AND PASSION WILL FIND HER.
LOUIS LOOKED DOWN INTO THE BOWL. THERE WAS NOTHING. THEN A SILVER LIQUID MIST BEGAN BREWING UP IN THE BOWL. LOUIS WAS SUCKED INTO A TRANCE. HE SAW FLASHES OF EMILY BEING TAKEN AWAY. HE COULD FEEL AND SEE HER HURTING. LOCKED IN CHAINS. TRISTIAN AND LORELEI HAD TO PULL HIM AWAY.
ORACLE: DID YOUR HEART GUIDE YOU?
LOUIS: WARLOCK…..A WARLOCK TOOK HER. WE MUST GO...
HE QUICKLY STOOD. HE BEGAN WALKING OUT THEN STOPPED AND LOOKED BACK AT THE ORACLE.
LOUIS: THANK YOU
|9th Mar 2009, 08:10 PM||#34|
brilliant update, totally luvin it.
|9th Mar 2009, 08:29 PM||#35|
oooo awesome update!
|10th Mar 2009, 11:42 AM||#36|
Join Date: Nov 2006
Great update that oracle is creepy looking but i expected her to be.
|12th Mar 2009, 07:20 AM||Chapter 8: The Unmasked Villian. #37|
DRAKE WALKED INTO THE ROOM.
Drake: “I HAVE GIVEN YOU YOUR REWARD NOW I WANT MINE.”
WILLIAM: YOU HAVE DONE WELL DRAKE…YOU SHALL RECEIVE YOUR REWARD..BUT FIRST THINGS FIRST. I MUST DRAIN THE POWER FROM THE GIRL.
DRAKE: I HAVE BETRAYED MY COVENT OF VAMPIRES. THEY WILL HUNT FOR ME.
WILLIAM: AS POWERFULL AS I WILL BE…..THE VAMPIRES WILL FEAR ME…EVEN THE ELDERS. NO ONE WILL MATCH MY POWERS.
EMILY LASHED OUT WITH PAIN AND TEARS. CRYS AND MOANS. SHE COULDN’T TAKE ALL THE PAIN. HELENA SLAPPED HER ACROSS THE FACE ONCE MORE.
HELENA: YOUR EYES DARLING….THERE SOON TO BE MINE..
SHE LAUGHED OUT. SHE PULLED OUT A KNIFE AND BEGAN CARVING A STAR ON HER CHEEK. BLOOD PEEKED OUT. TWO OTHER GUARDS HAD THERE TURNS OF HITTING HER AND SLAPPING HER. PUNCHES LEFT AND RIGHT. EMILY LOST HER BREATHE FOR A QUICK SECOND AFTER TAKING A PUNCH TO THE GUT.
HELENA: LEAVE US.
EMILY HAD NO ENERGY WHAT SO EVER TO SCREAM OR CRY. SHE JUST HUNG THERE FROM THE CHAINS LIKE A PRISONER SHE WAS.
HELENA: IN HERE ….YOUR OUR SLAVE. NOTHING NO LESS. WHAT A WASTE YOU ARE!
HELENA STAIRED DOWN AT HER AND BEGAN CARESSING HER BREAST AND FACE.
WILLIAM: THAT’S ENOUGH SISTER….WE DON’T WANT TO KILL OUR GUEST NOW ...DO WE?
HELENA SNARLED AT EMILY….
EMILY: JUST KILL ME ALREADY!
WILLIAM SHOOK HIS HEAD IN DISAGREEMENT.
WILLIAM: YOUR POWERS ARE SOON TO BE MINE…I MUST THANKYOU FIRST. I HAVE BEEN LEFT IN SUCH HORRIBLE SCARS AMONG MY BODY.
EMILY: BURN IN HELL! YOU BASTARD!
WILLIAM: YOU FIRST DARLING. WHEN THE NEXT FULL MOON APPEARS YOU SHALL BE SACRIFICED. YOUR BLOOD SHALL BE MINE AND NOT EVEN YOUR VAMPIRE FRIENDS SHALL STAND IN MY WAY.
WILLIAM: YOUR BLOOD WILL NOT ONLY CURE ME BUT GIVE ME POWERS BEYOND THIS UNIVERSE HAS EVER SEEN…I SHALL BE A GOD AMONG THOSE WHO HAVE NOT WITNESS. IT IS ONLY MY DESTINY….NOTHING PERSONAL GIRL.
EMILY: WELL TAKE YOUR DESTINY AND SHOVE IT UP YOUR ASS YOUR ROYALNESS.
EMILY SPIT AT HIS MASK. WILLIAM BEGAN TO CHUCKLE.
WILLIAM: I WAS ONCE BEAUTIFUL … MY SKIN SO SMOOTH AND SOFT AS YOURS..
HE LIGHTLY LAYED HIS HAND AGAINST HER CHEEK. EMILY TURNED AWAY.
HE TURNED AROUND AND TOOK OFF HIS MASK.
WILLIAM: NOW LOOK AT ME!!! LOOK AT ME!
HE SCREAMED OUT.
EMILY COULD ALMOST PUKE. SHE GAGGED OUT LOUD. FEELING HER VOMIT REACH HER THROAT.
WILLIAM: NOT FOR LONG…AS THE NEXT KNIGHTFALL ARRIVES THE MOON SHALL MEET UPON MY REQUEST AND NOTHING SHALL STAND IN MY WAY.
THEN LOUD GUN SHOTS COULD BE HEARD FROM OUTSIDE. AN ALARM BEGAN SAILING OFF INTO THE ROOMS.
EMILY: LETS SEE WHO’S POWERFULL NOW….YOUR HIGHNESS.
|12th Mar 2009, 01:29 PM||#38|
Join Date: Nov 2006
wow he looks scary. Great update.
|12th Mar 2009, 06:56 PM||#39|
thanxs 2 sweetsweetie85 and angel4rab and Mrs.Kuma for following my stories :]
|17th Mar 2009, 09:44 AM||Chapter 9: Love & Terror. #40|
Drake: Louis so gald you join us.
Louis glimmered his fangs at them. The guards began to quickly shoot. Louis moved so fast it was as if he barely moved at all. It was as if he moved at the speed of light and only trails of his shadows were left behind.
Guards screamed out and blood splithered out onto the floor.The last female guard began shooting only Louis began using the dead guard in his arms as a sheild. The female guard was quickly weeped off her feet by Tristian who sprang in through the room.
Helena stood at the side of Drake. Then in came William. Louis eyed him and Tristian stood there ready to attack Drake or the masked man known as William.
William: You think you have won …. Do you?
Louis: I don’t fear warlocks and there magic.....
William: A powerful elder you might be…..but the girl will end up in my hands
Louis: you wont live long enough to even have the chance.
A powerful light streamed into the room. Blue and green smoke flashed into the room and they were gone. Louis looked at Tristian.
Louis: Keep an eye out. I can sense her presence near by.
Louis traveled beneath the mansion and led his way into chambers beneath the floors. He arrived to find Emily half a live. She looked up and smiled out at him as if he were the only light in the room.
Emily: You came for me…..no one ever…ever cared as much as you do. How did you find me?
Louis: I have my ways…here let me help you out of those chains.
Louis helped her down. Emily kept her eyes on him as she leaped into his arms. She came closer to Louis as did he. She put her lips on his. His lips smooth and cold. Yet she liked it. It prickled her lips.
She didn’t let go. Emily began taking his coat off. He ripped her tight leather crourset off. She slipped out of her dress and began laying on the cold floor. At the moment she didn’t care about anything and nothing. Just Louis and for the first time in Emily’s life she felt in love.
Emily: Make love with me..
She whisped in his ear.
|17th Mar 2009, 04:18 PM||#41|
Join Date: Nov 2006
Awww well thats kinda cool and a little weird that they are doing that right then and there but great update.
|17th Mar 2009, 08:53 PM||#42|
lol i like my storys to be a bit cheesy
|17th Mar 2009, 09:07 PM||#43|
Oh my! o_O
My story will have that..Eventually...>_> I mean cheesy part...I like mozzarella :D
|17th Mar 2009, 10:56 PM||#44|
Join Date: Mar 2009
radical dude lol
|18th Mar 2009, 09:25 AM||#45|
im lovin it!
|26th Mar 2009, 04:52 AM||Chapter 10: The Carfvex Layer. #46|
Hey Guys hope your enjoying the story so far. Well sorry it took a little long for the update but now its here so please do enjoy! Leave comments and thoughts and questions and all the goodies! i love hearing 4rm you guys.
Emily awoken and she could hear voices down the hall. It was not long ago when she had arrived there at the secret mansion of Louis. She had passed out again and had re awoken now. She sat up and began walking over to the unknown room. The floor was cold and made her feet ache. She walked into the oval room where Louis awaited her.
Louis: Welcome Emily…
Emily looked over and anyalzed the oval room. Tristian sat in a chair talking to Lorelei who was sitting across from him in the sofa.
Louis: welcome to the Carfvex chambers….out location is highly secret and know one except the four of us know of this location. I can assure you that this time no one will find us. We must have been followed last time….Drake has something to do with this.
Emily: its time for answers Louis….please.
Louis nodded his agreement and led them back into the room.
Louis stairred into her eyes as she did into his. She closed her eyes and let seconds pass by.
Louis: no need to fear Emily … I wont allow them to hurt you.
Emily opened up her eyes and continued to stair back.
Emily: So many unanswered questions and answers and yet I hardly know you but never has someone stood up for me like you have…..am like emtionally drawn toward you….when they took me away all I could keep thinking about was you.
Emily grabbed Louis’s hand.
Louis: I will follow you into darkness Emily…….and lead you into the light.
Emily: Did you know my mother?
Louis: No…..never even met her…but she herself was a legend. They all wanted her because of the bloodline she was decendent apon just like you. They wont stop….none of them. Not until your dead. Not until one of them have gained your powers.
Emily: So you didn’t know my mother….and my father?
Louis: None of your bloodline …. Only you. I found you when I approached the Oracle of my destiny in life. If the elders find out…they too. Will come after you. I don’t know what your cappable of. What you can do or how. Only that you’re the most valuable thing in this world. I’ve had a chance in life and now am something more.
Emily: So what now? How do we make this all stop?
Louis: I must see the Oracle again. She might have answer for you and I both.
Emily: These warlocks are after me?
Louis: Those who seek it … will be after you. The convent could charge me with treachrey. I can only do so much and guide you with my knowledge. We will get answers…I promise you. The Oracle will help us….but until now I need you to rest.
Emily: where are you leaving off to?
Louis: I must see the elders tonight…do not worry. Lorelei and my apprentice are here. No one will find us I promise you…now rest.
Am Back and its Time to get BittersWeet xoxo
|26th Mar 2009, 05:56 AM||#47|
I likey :D
I have no questions. it is good so far xD
|26th Mar 2009, 07:01 PM||#48|
really great update keep at it, got a little bit embarrassed there reading the last chapter lol
|28th Mar 2009, 08:10 AM||#49|
Join Date: Nov 2006
Really good update. Dont have much else to say though lol.
|29th Mar 2009, 07:44 AM||Chapter 11: The Elders #50|
Vincent walked into the mansion of the elders. There were three elders present. Louis the only male out of the three lead the pack. The blonde curly hair was Victoira and the other woman was known as Amelia.
Louis: To what favor do we owe your presence?
Vincent: My lords...I come to warn you of Louis.
Louis: What concerns do you bring upon us?
Vincent: Treachery....he's betrayed the vampire code and convent. He must be put to trail.
Amelia: Louis would not conduct in such activity. It is agaisnt his bitter nature.
Vincent: He's not conducted in treachery but killed some of my people.
Louis: Your Ghouls are not any concerns to us. They should be put to rest. Comprimising the vampire nature will only bring us to the spotlight of humanity.
Vincent: His apprentice too has been affliated with his behavior. I only ask for further investigation into this crisis to take place. That is why I have brought it to your attention my lords.
Louis: We will handle matters from here. Until such times notice you shall stay out of our way.
Vincent: Thank you.
(On the roof top)
Victoria awaited on the roof top stairing at the moon. Vincent appeared from the mist and behind her.
Vincent: Beautiful isnt it?
Victoria: Your ghouls are causing up a stir. Hush them. That traitor sold us out for the Warlock.
Vincent: You must of known others would come for the girl as well Victoria.
Victoria: Find the girl....We need to act quickly before winds up in the wrong hands once more.
Vincent: Yes my lord...and what of the elders?
Victoria: Once the girl comes to us....nothing shall stand agaisnt my will. Ill take care of the others once Louis is taken well care of by the Elders.
Vincent: The Powers of a true god in the palm of your hands.
Victoria: A new dawn is approaching and all shall bow at my feet.
Am Back and its Time to get BittersWeet xoxo